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Spilled Purse (A challenge from Poet deVine)

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Dark Angel
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0 posted 08-25-99 06:58 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Angel

Spilled Purse

As I walked through the gardens
Of this secluded neighbourhood park
I suddenly glimpse a spilled purse
As the day becomes dark

Slowly I walk to it and wonder why it's there
I look inside to find
The cutest teddy bear
Was it forgotten
Was it stolen
Darn, why do I care ?

But this child is probably sobbing
Crying and hissing
Cause, her teddy bear she is missing
I suppose I'd better do the right thing
And give the local paper a ring

I'm glad I found this spilled purse
Cause that child will no longer be in despair
Cause when tomorrow comes
She'll have her teddy bear
© Copyright 1999 Dark Angel - All Rights Reserved
suthern
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1 posted 08-25-99 07:41 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I missed seeing the challenge... but I'm enjoying the responses!
Toerag
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2 posted 08-25-99 07:46 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Angel.....this was superb!
Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 08-25-99 08:57 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Dark Angel,
Enjoyable read.
Poet deVine
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4 posted 08-25-99 09:20 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Gosh! You finished it quickly! Very good! I was surprised that you chose a teddy bear, but it was very good.

By the way, the challenge was to write a poem focused on one object. A purse (handbag) that lay open someplace is an object. The focus of the poem became an object within that bag...DarkAngel could have chosen anything that was 'spilled'... some things like lipstick, money, keys would be something you'd expect to see. Her challenge was to write about something one doesn't ordinarily see in a bag! She did a good job!
WhtDove
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5 posted 08-25-99 01:02 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

You certainly wouldn't see a teddy bear often in a bag. Good job!!!
Dark Angel
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6 posted 08-25-99 05:10 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Thanks Suthern,Toerag Seymour WhtDove and PoetdeVine.

Poet, now that you've pointed it out, I realise that the focus should've been the purse/handbag, instead I opted for what was inside hmmmmm well I guess thats where I flunked in English lol.The teddy bear came into mind and would not leave hehe. Anyway I enjoyed writing it and thanks again. :-))
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7 posted 08-25-99 05:55 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

NO! Dear, you did the right thing as we discussed! You took an object and focused on a small part of it......it was perfect!
Elizabeth
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8 posted 08-25-99 08:53 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

How unexpected, Dark Angel. I'm glad the child got her teddy back-sweet!

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."
miriam
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9 posted 08-26-99 02:32 PM       View Profile for miriam   Email miriam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for miriam

i was reading your poem with a friend and came up this conclusion: there's an inner child in you! One that loves to share and takes great pleasure in seeing others happy. By returning the teddy bear you stopped a heart from crying.
 
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