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The Architect

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Balladeer
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0 posted 08-24-99 11:24 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I stood there on the quiet street,
My brand new house in front of me.
It would be everything I'd need,
The architect said happily.

I seemed to notice evidence
As minutes drifted slowly by
That there were things that made no sense;
Some features seemed to be awry.

I know that I'm no builder, but
In my mind it does surely seem
That, for a house to stand for long,
It needs to have some well-placed beams.

I asked to see the blueprints but
The architect had none to show.
He said emotion was his guide
And did construction with a "flow".

I then asked for him to explain
Its structural integrity.
He smiled a smile of merriment
And did his best to humor me.

He explained to me in quiet voice
That one reserves to humor fools
That, when emotions lead the way,
There is no need to follow rules.

The heart, he said, must be the guide.
One's passions as the guiding force.
Emotions serving as the base,
Imagination as the source.

As I peeked inside, I could see
The living room was barely there,
Some walls were no more than half done,
The spiral staircase led nowhere.

The tiles had only been half-laid;
The porcelain sinks already chipped,
Door handles wouldn't turn at all,
The shower had a leak that dripped.

I hung my head and walked away.
I didn't even turn around
When, with the next breath of fresh air,
My brand new house came tumbling down.

So now, with my dreams fallen down
And with my home completely wrecked
I vow to never hire again
A poet for an architect.
© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
redwriter1
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1 posted 08-24-99 11:55 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

I have lots and lots of houses like that!
Some have only basements, some only have attics, but they all have a front porch with a view.

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**A dream is a wish your heart makes :)

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 08-25-99 12:12 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

A point well taken. Enjoyed the read.
Christopher
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3 posted 08-25-99 01:26 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

You know, I'm a drafter, and working for an architect, I see some similarities to this and work!
WD! Bal!

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Toerag
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4 posted 08-25-99 07:39 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Hey pal?...Why don't ya let me and LongJohn build one for ya?...Just think of the possibilities?....Hell, it may not make Southern Living magazine, but it may be profiled on Riply's Believe It or Not?
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on the threshold of a dream


5 posted 08-25-99 07:46 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Great poem! But you might want to pass on Toe's offer... can you imagine the "possibilities" they could come up with for your living... ahem.. pleasures? LOL.

Seriously, 'Deer... I saw this one coming... as I proceeded through every verse, I thought... that's my poetry!!! LOL. Half-baked, a thought here, another there... with the most tenous of connections.
Blondie
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6 posted 08-25-99 08:40 AM       View Profile for Blondie   Email Blondie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Blondie

Very creative and enjoyable to read. Love the last verse
WhtDove
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7 posted 08-25-99 09:53 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Great point!
hoot_owl_rn
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Balladeer....I think that might be a good idea...but I think that must have been the same architect that built the Winchester Mystery House, and people pay big bucks to go see that
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9 posted 08-25-99 10:31 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

In my poetry that's all a tumble
I give my opinion here most humble
Tis better to live in a house with heart
than in a house built architect smart

Walls may be straight, doors open wide
but what of the heart that dwells inside
built with love any house can be
the perfect setting for my poetry!

I enjoyed your poem, Balladeer! Another good one!
Poetwheel
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10 posted 08-25-99 11:49 AM       View Profile for Poetwheel   Email Poetwheel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Poetwheel's Home Page   View IP for Poetwheel

Sounds like recalling a memory...building a house?


PW

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11 posted 08-25-99 11:53 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

DeVine one, any little joint
Can serve you well. That's not the point.
Why settle for only one when you,
With little effort, can have the two?

Your poem can be constructed well
And still convey the thoughts you tell.
Please always write straight from the heart
Just plan it out before you start.

A structured house that has no soul
Should not be any poet's goal
But one with no base, only heart
Will, within minutes, fall apart.

Combine the two things, if you can
Write from the heart but with a plan
And you may be amazed to see
How good a poet you can be.
Sunshine
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12 posted 08-25-99 11:54 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

For a poet to build a house for me
he'd have to look into my heart and see
that there's no room for any neglect
but plenty of rooms for loving, by heck!

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


Nan
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13 posted 08-27-99 02:07 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

..well, I'd like a house for each season... one in the mountains for the fall foliage ..and one by the ocean in the spring, and one by the ocean in the summer, and one by the ocean in the winter...someplace warm please???
 
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