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LngJhnAg
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0 posted 08-23-99 09:51 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for LngJhnAg

I heard the Angels singing sweetly
The day you came into my heart.
My ears werenít just ringing,
I could swear it was singing,
For the lyrics danced in the air.

Swept off my feet and climbing steeply,
I was delirious with joy from the start.
I was soaring in the clouds,
With angels singing loud,
My forever I placed in your care.

I fell for you deeply and indiscreetly,
I couldnít imagine us being apart.
Although I heard laughter,
Coming from the hereafter,
I thought it was the angels, I swear.

When you left you crushed me completely,
You turned my world of light into dark.
Singing angels are gone,
Now the silence lives on,
And my life is now filled with despair.

Iíve learned each of my lessons meekly,
You taught me well while enjoying your lark.
This storyís lesson rings true,
When thereís singing for you,
Be sure its the Angels up there.
© Copyright 1999 Michael Waterman - All Rights Reserved
WhtDove
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1 posted 08-23-99 09:59 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I like your story, especially the end.
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2 posted 08-23-99 10:05 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This one tugs at the heartstrings. I get sick and tired of seeing poor, little, mousy guys like you always being treated this way by real women. Hang in there, John. Some day there will be a woman who will not step on you and squash you like a bug....not!

(by the way, the poem is EXCELLENT!)
LngJhnAg
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3 posted 08-23-99 10:38 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

That's ok 'Deer...I get stepped on by guys too. So why not get stepped on by a deer?
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4 posted 08-23-99 10:48 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Then let me at least say that your rhyme scheme of ABCCD carried throughout the poem is unique to me and is a monumental achievement in my book....very impressive.
Delores Hall
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Enjoyed your poem.
Poet deVine
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6 posted 08-23-99 11:55 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Maybe it wasn't Angels singing! Were you in KMart? Was the song "blue light special"?

Love your poem, you do have a way with words..your lady is very lucky!
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7 posted 08-23-99 11:59 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

I'd tell you I'm sorry about what happened, but that is such a wimpy word and it doesn't begin to express the way I am feeling. I am angry at this woman! Like Balladeer, I am sick of seeing women walk on men (maybe you should read my poem "The Temptress"). They make me sick and I hope they get what is coming to them.

Sorry-didn't mean to ramble. I like the rhyme scheme. You don't see this kind too often. Congrats on being able to carry it all through the poem. Good Luck.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."
Alwye
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Very unique rhyme scheme, I enjoyed it!! Wonderful work all around!!

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*Krista Knutson*

I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller


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9 posted 08-24-99 09:59 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

LJA: Am I too late to step on you, too? *G* Darn my lousy timing!!! (But kudos to your poem! *S*)
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LJA

I've posted my response to this wonderful work on the Forum. I hope you enjoy it.
Great work, wise one!

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow




[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 08-24-99).]
LngJhnAg
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Thank you one and all - this really didn't happen to me (very often). In writing the poem I was more interested in the rhyme scheme (as that devilishly clever Balladeer noted) than I was in writing about a first person experience. BTW - a woman walking all over me? oh, Heavens, YES! Please? with heels, too?

deVine and Belle - are you two from the same sorority? lol - I loved your comments.

Sunshine girl - posted your comments on the forum? Oh, geeze - where is the forum? I haven't a clue. I'll go browsing. thanks for your kudos.
Talon
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12 posted 08-26-99 01:17 PM       View Profile for Talon   Email Talon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Talon

Same thing hit me - the rhyming! After reading the first stanza it all comes into play. Very nicely written Long John
tori
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Very nice work LngJhnAg great story
passing shadows
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ah...the good oldies
 
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