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Poetwheel
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0 posted 08-23-99 09:15 PM       View Profile for Poetwheel   Email Poetwheel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Poetwheel's Home Page   View IP for Poetwheel

Dan
the one eyed man
drove his van
(full of bran)
to Pakistan
without a plan
to prove he can
cause cousin stan
had said that dan
was an "also ran"

Steve
did not believe
he saw dan leave
his van did weave
on new years eve
would dan achieve
with heart on sleeve
and overcome his major peeve
or would old steve
of dan bereave?

said Mabel
fist on table
its no fable
to pakistan my dan is able
shed his label
like clark gable
he will run them like a cable

Captain Grode
said it snowed
was no traction on the road
which dan had goed
he never slowed
hit a tree; made car explode
record showed
high winds blowed
dan was dead before he knowed

Mabel, Steve & Cousin Stan
each had different thoughts of dan
some had said 'he never can'
...since he was a one eyed man
but evermore when they ate bran
or saw a grey-green panel van
they bowed their heads, their eyes did scan
to the orange jerry can
where cremated remains of dan
stood upon the tv stand

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Elizabeth
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1 posted 08-24-99 12:01 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Kind of bizarre, but a down-to-earth, very real, sadly very common story. And excellent rhyme.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."
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2 posted 08-24-99 01:05 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This is great, Wheel. Imagination in full swing! I love it!


Hey, check out Case of the Five and Dimer Rhymer I posted while you were gone. Two birds with one shot! They're back up to full strength now, though. Watch your back!
Moonlight
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3 posted 08-24-99 02:41 AM       View Profile for Moonlight   Email Moonlight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonlight's Home Page   View IP for Moonlight

I like the poetwheel style! Cool poem. It was odd, but sad and that funky rhyme scheme works great.

~m~
wayoutwalt
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4 posted 08-24-99 04:31 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

this like funniest thing i read here yuh i used to walk my paper route and see how much o a sentence i could come up with rhyming each word with the same rhyme yuh tiz fun passes time too try it people
Poetwheel
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Posts 215
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5 posted 08-24-99 07:50 AM       View Profile for Poetwheel   Email Poetwheel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Poetwheel's Home Page   View IP for Poetwheel

Thanks guys. For those of you who managed to find sadness in my one-eyed-bran-van saga I say this: there was not a shred of meaning in this silly poem. Just a bunch of rhyme. Thanks! I'll go read 5 & dime now...

PW

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Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 08-24-99 09:01 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Poetwheel,
You did a good job
I enjoyed the read.
WhtDove
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7 posted 08-24-99 09:05 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

This was neat. Great rhyming!
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Listening to every heart


8 posted 08-24-99 01:41 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

And the title is for another poem, right?

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


 
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