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the apple of his eye

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wordweaver
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0 posted 08-23-99 04:39 PM       View Profile for wordweaver   Email wordweaver   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wordweaver


From the front steps she watched him work in the yard.
Seemed to her he liked to work real hard.

To this golden haired little girl
the man in the garden was the king of her world.

She noticed as he worked with his hands,
how his muscles seemed bigger than any other mans.

How the sun shined off his hair
and how he handled the fruit with such care.

She then noticed the gleem in is eye,
and it was obvious to her the reason why.

This tall man that she called dad,
this king of her castle, her personal Sir Galahad...

Was a man of pride, and strong bearing,
and from his face you could tell he was caring.

It was obvious to her that for him one thing gave him joy
and put a smile on his face like that of a small boy...

The object of his affection,
the love to which he gave so much attention.

Could you guess the one thing
that put that gleem in his eye
that gave his existence a reason why?

You see for the little girl knew the truth,
for she had amazing insight for some one of her youth.

She understood, though it brought pain.
How clear the truth was and how it would always remain.

That it was not the little girl
that made him king of his world.

But rather the orchard was the reason why,
and the fruit he grew was the apple of his eye.

[This message has been edited by wordweaver (edited 08-23-99).]

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1 posted 08-23-99 05:04 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

This is inherently sad.

Word of comment: please work a little on your spelling/grammar. It draws away from what is otherwise a nice piece of work.

Thanks for sharing, looking forward to more.

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


wordweaver
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2 posted 08-23-99 10:11 PM       View Profile for wordweaver   Email wordweaver   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wordweaver

My dearest,this is so heartfelt. Thank you. K
wordweaver
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3 posted 08-24-99 07:14 AM       View Profile for wordweaver   Email wordweaver   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wordweaver

thanks sunshine for the compliment and the suggestion of editing, thus the note from my sweetheart, my editor.thanks love, for whom this was written.

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wow I really liked this!!
 
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