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Horizon's Edge

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Kyle_R
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0 posted 08-23-99 12:15 AM       View Profile for Kyle_R   Email Kyle_R   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kyle_R's Home Page   View IP for Kyle_R

This is a sonnet I wrote a couple minutes ago. Please comment and tell me what it makes you think about...

"Horizon's Edge"

A reprise of lost gazes, idle thoughts,
flexed gently throughout flowing streams of light,
where upon endeavors of strangers sought
a place of timelessness to guild their might,
collective groves, common to all and none,
stretching souls as plaster upon oneself,
drinks worries and troubles into the sun,
pressed back tongues of greed to cascade love's wealth,
a celestial greeting of mind and heart,
praised solely for aesthetic existence,
revivals of aged life and nature's art,
found strangled by man's selfish resistence...

by Kyle K. Richardson

PS: yes, i am new to this forum so i don't really know anyone here or their critiquing styles but i am all for any remarks. don't hold back..

[This message has been edited by Kyle_R (edited 08-23-99).]
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Kyle_R
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1 posted 08-23-99 12:28 AM       View Profile for Kyle_R   Email Kyle_R   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kyle_R's Home Page   View IP for Kyle_R

anyone?
Alwye
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2 posted 08-23-99 12:38 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Very nice work, I enjoyed it!! Welcome to the family, I hope to see more from you!!

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*Krista Knutson*

I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller


Kyle_R
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3 posted 08-23-99 12:41 AM       View Profile for Kyle_R   Email Kyle_R   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kyle_R's Home Page   View IP for Kyle_R

thank you Alwye, i'm glad you enjoyed it (i'm rather new at poetry and this was pretty much my first sonnet, took me at least half an hour to write!). i plan to spend much more time here at the "passionate forums".
Poet deVine
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4 posted 08-23-99 02:25 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Welcome to the forum, Kyle. Your sonnet is quite worthy..your imagery is excellent! I look forward to reading more....
Kyle_R
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5 posted 08-23-99 03:12 AM       View Profile for Kyle_R   Email Kyle_R   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kyle_R's Home Page   View IP for Kyle_R

thank you for the welcome, PdV, and all the same kindness to you as well.
hoot_owl_rn
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Nicely done Kyle...looking forward to more

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
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7 posted 08-23-99 01:46 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Welcome, Kyle...

I like the imagery in your poem.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."
Kyle_R
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8 posted 08-23-99 07:58 PM       View Profile for Kyle_R   Email Kyle_R   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kyle_R's Home Page   View IP for Kyle_R

thanks for the open arms Elizabeth and hoot. i hope to string along more artistry of the mind...
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