Honolulu, HI, USA
This is a sonnet I wrote a couple minutes ago. Please comment and tell me what it makes you think about...
A reprise of lost gazes, idle thoughts,
flexed gently throughout flowing streams of light,
where upon endeavors of strangers sought
a place of timelessness to guild their might,
collective groves, common to all and none,
stretching souls as plaster upon oneself,
drinks worries and troubles into the sun,
pressed back tongues of greed to cascade love's wealth,
a celestial greeting of mind and heart,
praised solely for aesthetic existence,
revivals of aged life and nature's art,
found strangled by man's selfish resistence...
by Kyle K. Richardson
PS: yes, i am new to this forum so i don't really know anyone here or their critiquing styles but i am all for any remarks. don't hold back..
[This message has been edited by Kyle_R (edited 08-23-99).]