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Love's Garden (my first Pantoum!!)
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Love's Garden (my first Pantoum!!) |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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Two kindred souls meet in this dazzling garden. The wind caresses the night like a lover's sigh. Once more two lonely strangers embrace again. Upon the silken wings of angels love flies. The wind caresses the night like a lover's sigh. The stars the only witness as shadows slowly combine. Upon the silken wings of angels love flies. With a dew moistened kiss your passion is mine. The stars the only witness as shadows slowly combine. Rays of pale moonlight gently move over your face. With a dew moistened kiss your passion is mine. Your love touches my soul like a heavenly grace. Rays of pale moonlight gently move over your face. In your eyes crystal tears of joy brightly glisten. Your love touches my soul like a heavenly grace. To the beating of your honest heart I quietly listen. In your eyes crystal tears of joy brightly glisten. Once more two lonely strangers embrace again. To the beating of your honest heart I quietly listen. Two kindred souls meet in this dazzling garden. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Bravo, Alwye! A worthy effort and an excellent result. ------------------ Well, write poetry, for God's sake, it's the only thing that matters. ---Edward Estlin Cummings |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you, Balladeer!! I enjoy this form emmensly.  ------------------ *Krista Knutson* I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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Kyle_R Junior Member
since 1999-08-23
Posts 12Honolulu, HI, USA |
wow. i love the way you began each stanza with the second line of the preceeding. brilliant work resounding with an echo of desire. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I definitely agree with both you and Balladeer. I love this form as well, Alwye. You have excelled at it quite readily. Your subject is heartbreakingly beautiful, as well. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you both, Kyle and Dream, for your kind words! ------------------ *Krista Knutson* I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
OK Krista That's it!!! I'm adopting you.....I've decided.... Tell your parents you'll see them after college...... They won't mind, will they?? Tell them it's for educational purposes....Ya think???? Seriously, you've done a very nice job on this - I really love it.... ------------------ Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done: For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits, Than I am sure I have in my whole five. ~ ²1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75 |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Hm, educational purposes, I like it!! Thanks a lot for your help and kind words, Nan!! Hm, what style should I attempt next? ------------------ *Krista Knutson* I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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