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~one voice~
Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

0 posted 1999-08-22 08:59 PM


From the genesis, there’s Choices.
She weighs and contemplates.
She listens to the voices
That sing of love and hate.

Overwhelming and confusing,
She knows not what to do;
Tired of the pleasing that
Lets her to sit and rue.

From somewhere 'round the center,
Decision is then found.
He strikes her like a splinter
And digs his way around.

Choices fades in to the black.
Decision owns her now.
There is no returning back-
For He controls her now.

Decision has his way with Her,
robs Choices of Her soul.
By spinning moons and jabbing spurs,
Decision has a goal.

He fathers a tiny child
that Choices is to bear.
God-forsaken, meek and mild,
this baby is the Heir.

Through piercing screams and tears of joy,
Decision is beguiled.
For Choices loves her baby boy,
And He is Destiny’s Child.

©1999 Erin Solari


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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."




[This message has been edited by ~one voice~ (edited 08-22-99).]

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Alicat
Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094
Coastal Texas
1 posted 1999-08-22 09:03 PM


Clever use of personification. I had a slight problem while reading this aloud with the very last line...guess it's just my pseudo-texan/yankee/undecided accent which turns the screw.


Alicat

Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

2 posted 1999-08-22 09:04 PM


Shivers....
What a way of looking at it! Great writing, yet again, one voice.

~one voice~
Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664
Billings, MT USA
3 posted 1999-08-22 09:14 PM


Forgive me Alicat... I didn't pay much attention to "rules" with this piece... I just sort of felt the need to write it! lol

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."



DreamEvil
Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396

4 posted 1999-08-22 09:57 PM


Excellent verse, love! You seem to be past the stumbling writer's block.

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©



WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
5 posted 1999-08-22 10:04 PM


Very well done. This was unique! I think you brought the thought out very well!
~one voice~
Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664
Billings, MT USA
6 posted 1999-08-23 04:44 AM


Thank you all! I appreciate your praise!

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."



Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

7 posted 1999-08-23 09:22 PM


One voice - I just wanted to let you know I have just responded to your plea in the alley - my heart is with you, girl. I can see greater significance in this poem now and it impresses me more than ever. Hugs.
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