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Destiny's Child

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~one voice~
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0 posted 08-22-99 08:59 PM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for ~one voice~

From the genesis, there’s Choices.
She weighs and contemplates.
She listens to the voices
That sing of love and hate.

Overwhelming and confusing,
She knows not what to do;
Tired of the pleasing that
Lets her to sit and rue.

From somewhere 'round the center,
Decision is then found.
He strikes her like a splinter
And digs his way around.

Choices fades in to the black.
Decision owns her now.
There is no returning back-
For He controls her now.

Decision has his way with Her,
robs Choices of Her soul.
By spinning moons and jabbing spurs,
Decision has a goal.

He fathers a tiny child
that Choices is to bear.
God-forsaken, meek and mild,
this baby is the Heir.

Through piercing screams and tears of joy,
Decision is beguiled.
For Choices loves her baby boy,
And He is Destiny’s Child.

©1999 Erin Solari


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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."




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Alicat
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1 posted 08-22-99 09:03 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Clever use of personification. I had a slight problem while reading this aloud with the very last line...guess it's just my pseudo-texan/yankee/undecided accent which turns the screw.


Alicat
Severn
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2 posted 08-22-99 09:04 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Shivers....
What a way of looking at it! Great writing, yet again, one voice.
~one voice~
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Billings, MT USA


3 posted 08-22-99 09:14 PM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Forgive me Alicat... I didn't pay much attention to "rules" with this piece... I just sort of felt the need to write it! lol

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."


DreamEvil
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4 posted 08-22-99 09:57 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Excellent verse, love! You seem to be past the stumbling writer's block.

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©


WhtDove
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5 posted 08-22-99 10:04 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Very well done. This was unique! I think you brought the thought out very well!
~one voice~
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6 posted 08-23-99 04:44 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Thank you all! I appreciate your praise!

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."


Severn
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7 posted 08-23-99 09:22 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

One voice - I just wanted to let you know I have just responded to your plea in the alley - my heart is with you, girl. I can see greater significance in this poem now and it impresses me more than ever. Hugs.
 
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