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Alwye
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In the space between moments


0 posted 08-22-99 01:27 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alwye

Wandering through the paths of my melancholy soul,
Embracing the eternal vision of which only I know.
Candlelit heaven's grace this world from overhead,
The flickering light speaking volumes, yet so much unsaid.

The wisdom of forever resides within the hearts of few,
Through the journey of understanding that is found in no pew.
To soar with the angels, one must first grow ethereal wings,
And truly understand the pain that love sometimes brings.

Through the wandering of my melancholy soul, I begin to realize,
That through one's own self is the way to love's expanding skies.
Dance within the fragrant blooming gardens of your secret dreams,
And understand that the path to peace is not always as it seems.

Times one must wade through forests of ignorance, poison fed with lies,
But sometimes lasting happiness is hidden within a clever disguise.
If you wander into the depths of your quiet, melancholy soul,
You'll find your peace, the eternal vision of which I know.


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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood

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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


1 posted 08-22-99 01:44 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

I liked this, but was a little confused. Was it your intent to bounce from "happy" to "sad" phrase???

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Alwye
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2 posted 08-22-99 01:53 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Yes, that was my intent, I'm glad you picked up on that. I wanted to somehow portray that when soulsearching, you've got to take the good with the bad. If you are still confused, then is there any way I could improve? I like this, but I think it could be better. Any comments would be much appreciated!!

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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood

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3 posted 08-22-99 10:34 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Alwye, I love it, its so deep and so true
pen of passion
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4 posted 08-22-99 10:42 AM       View Profile for pen of passion   Email pen of passion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pen of passion

It was a great poem, but I agree with Christopher the theme needs clearing.
Misty Rayne
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5 posted 08-25-99 07:35 PM       View Profile for Misty Rayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Misty Rayne's Home Page   View IP for Misty Rayne

Hi,Hon....It is so very nice....how I love your poetry and your continual growth!

I,personally,would check out a complete Thesaurus for more words for "melancholy".I would not repeat this word if I could find others as powerful. The word is powerful enough to stand once.

Keep up the fantastic work!!

Misty Rayne.
 
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