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The Cobblestone Walk (a bit rough)
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The Cobblestone Walk (a bit rough) |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
older, time wisened enclothed in a melancholy air her hesitant step leads her near near the centre of her heart the centre she has hidden so well these many long years she wonders if he'll know her she wonders if he'll still be waiting she wonders if she's too late sun sparkling down in a carefree giggle upon her skin reveals a crisp white circle where, until so recently, a band of gold lay her step slows, for in her vision is a garden a garden, she knew as if created by her own hand a row of lush lavendar up each side of a mossy cobblestone walk a walk that leads to a heavy oaken door a door inset with stained glass pictures of Hummingbirds (never seen in this country) pictures of Columbine and Roses and Wisteria she can't move, or breathe, or think the moment of waiting has passed and her love, her future rests here up a few feet of stone through a door of glass in a house of oak and granite she turns to flee as the door slowly opens oh God! he's seen her now averting her face she mumbles hello and walks past he speaks her name, in a voice richer with time, sweeter with age more loving with waiting his accent more pronounced from years of country living her heart thrills and wakens to his tone and she turns with a hesitant smile his hand extended in welcome his words so simple "Welcome home darling" ------------------ "I would rather sit on a pumpkin, and have it all to myself, than to be crowded on a velvet cushion." .....Henry David Thoreau |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
Beautiful. I LOVE it. The imagery was great, and I loved the way you described everything. I really liked the lines that say: "Sun sparkling down in a carefree giggle upon her skin reveals a crisp white circle, where, until so recently, a band of gold lay" Wonderful; you put much power behind your words. |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
this was written totally from the heart Emmy, that's prolly where the power came from eh?  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I'm an old romantic at heart, and this got tears starting in my eyes! Sniff sniff, lovely. [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 08-21-99).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Izzy, You swing a mean brush with a full palette. A rich picture. thank you. |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
I prefer this version, but then you knew I would darling. oh Damn, I still need those kleenex though! Love, YOUR Eric. ------------------ I believe in fairy tales but then I'm just a silly romantic, what do I know? |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh my, wonderfully written piece here. The imagery in this one was fantastic...down to the detail about the white circle. The flow runs very smoothly and it just moves right along capturing the reader in it's grasp. Nicely done!!!!! ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Amazing my dear, simply marvelous tale Izzy. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Stunning, so romantic. I especially loved the lines-- "Sun sparkling down in a carefree giggle upon her skin reveals a crisp white circle, where, until so recently, a band of gold lay". Beautiful work. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
A beautiful flow Isabelle Skye. |
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