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Waiting in the Shadows

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Poet deVine
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I see you waiting in the shadows
for the rising of the moon,
embracing nature's splendor
hearing her rhythmic tune.
A breeze lifts your scent to me,
I feel the spirit of your soul.
In awe I wait to bear witness
as you and the night become whole.
As the clouds of heaven part
to reveal the moon's full glow,
I silently turn and walk away,
from a man I'll never know.
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blueloon
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1 posted 08-21-99 02:15 PM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blueloon

I feel as if every woman in here will be able to relate to your simple, yet powerful words. I know for sure that I can. Excellent work.
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2 posted 08-21-99 03:04 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

PoetdeVine,
I guess you had your reasons.
Enjoyed the poem
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3 posted 08-21-99 03:29 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

This was beautifully done, but I got the impression that what was standing and waiting was not a man even though you mentioned turning away from a man you'd never know at the end. Am I correct or just reading it wrong? Is there something else there or is this just another one of my interpretations that people normally look at me rather strangely for?
Sue
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4 posted 08-21-99 04:02 PM       View Profile for Sue   Email Sue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sue

Echoes of disillusion. Lovely.
Poet deVine
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5 posted 08-21-99 04:08 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Temptress! Very good...there is deeper story here, not one that's easily seen. I wanted to imply something other than what you read! Very good, my dear!
Craig
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6 posted 08-21-99 10:05 PM       View Profile for Craig   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Craig

I get more out of this every time I read it, you have an art PDV ( and a heart)
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7 posted 08-21-99 10:34 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

It's wonderfully written, deVine one. I'd like to know the story.
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I'd like to know the story too....very powerful work, deVine.

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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood

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9 posted 08-22-99 12:28 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

What can I say, you are an excellent poet, dear Lady.

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
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Are we subtly speaking of love here?
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No clue as to what it might be (airhead701 speaks!) But, Poet deVine, this piece has your name written all over it-if I had read this without knowing the author's name, I'd have thought it was you. I like your style, keep it up!

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."
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12 posted 08-22-99 09:00 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

What mystery! I could feel the night all around me as I read this. Lovely work P dV.
Kyle_R
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13 posted 08-23-99 12:33 AM       View Profile for Kyle_R   Email Kyle_R   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kyle_R's Home Page   View IP for Kyle_R

i don't know why but your poem saddens me. sweetly worded, yet a sense of longing is woven all throughout your lines. perhaps it's just me.
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14 posted 08-23-99 09:41 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Since this has gotten such a good response, I've decided to expand the story and will work on a trilogy. I sincerely appreciate all your kind words! It means a great deal to me.
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Well I hope he follows or she turns around ... another wonderful poem ... thank you
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PdV, whatever you come up with to add to your list of classics will be none the less a thrillogy.

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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17 posted 08-23-99 06:19 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

WOW, so deep and such mystery, I love it
DARILYN SUE
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Beautful!

Poet deVine
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19 posted 08-24-99 07:51 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Thank you all again. I am amazed! I had this sitting in my poetry folder on my computer and don't know why I never posted it before! Maybe I better get in there and clean house more often!
Seymour Tabin
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20 posted 08-24-99 08:56 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Poet deVine,
Don't know how I missed this one?
Excellent job of expressing something
almost everyone goes through.
Big TU.
WhtDove
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21 posted 08-24-99 09:22 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I may be wrong here, but I looked at this more spiritually. But then that is how I tend to look at things. Nevertheless, it is great! You have great talent!
 
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