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Emptiness |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
I am filled with emptiness inside me. I hunger for those emotions gone by. I long for passion that you stir in me. I long for your kisses- I cannot lie. I hunger for those emotions gone by. Memories of you are my great past-time. I long for your kisses- I cannot lie. You’ve inspired all my sweet prose and rhyme. Memories of you are my great past-time. Your absence leaves my heart with such sweet void. You’ve inspired all my sweet prose and rhyme. Your memory n’er leaves my words destroyed. Your absence leaves my heart with such sweet void. I miss you more than I could ever say. Your memory n’er leaves my words destroyed. You are my entity- my night and day. I miss you more than I could ever say. I love you more than all the grains of sand. You are my entity- my night and day. I need you to hold tight to my hand. I love you more than all the grains of sand. I long for passion that you stir in me. I need you to hold tight to my hand. I am filled with emptiness inside me. ©1999 Erin Solari ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Awesome pantoum, my dear. I knew you were up to the task. Writer's block be damned. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Ahh... thank you very much... I hope your challenge cured it!  ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wow........ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
One Voice, Enjoyed the Pantoum, nice job. |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Thank you so much! Both of you... ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wonderful, one voice!! Exellent work!  ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
A very worthy effort, one voice. Well Done. ------------------ Well, write poetry, for God's sake, it's the only thing that matters. ---Edward Estlin Cummings |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Thank you so much.. once again... ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
WOW, I really liked the way you played with the lines in your poem... repeating certain ones in the next stanza like that. It really helped keep the flow, and flow it certainly did! Well done, one voice, well done! |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Lovely and poignant, I can relate to this one! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I have the same hunger |
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