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Just a ditty. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
The quintessential fire that would fuel my burning desire for this ecstacy of release that I find in verse, might soon cease to be a curse and rather a blessing instead. Rambling along through random things absurd leaves me babbling each word that comes to mind in a manner designed to mesmerize and cauterize with my wit or lack of it. So if any decide they don't like this rhyme and happen to find the time, please respond in kind as well those that are of like mind since I treasure other views, at least those that don't abuse. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Speechified poems...what a treat! ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
LOL! YOu winder of words you. You mean writing ever was a curse? Are you mad!!! jk |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
DreamEvil, All I can say is, It's a pity It's only a ditty. Marvalus web of words and ties and I'm sure it will catch many flies. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Dreamer Lol - this was a tricky bit of reading - I had to go over it a couple times to get the hang of it. You never fail to amaze me with your mercurial use of styles. I picked up a lot of the rhymes, but the last rhyme of the first stanza escapes me. Was that deliberate? Additionally, the last rhymes of the last two stanzas hit with different numbers of words. This threw me off (no difficult task) a little, but I reread these stanzas with the expectation of change, and it worked out OK. |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
Mr. Evil, Your skill with words leaves me hungry for more. |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
Nicely done brother!  ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Interesting new style Dream... I like it! ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Fabulous darling! I loved this..."ecstasy of release..." and it should "be a blessing!" I repeat myself when I say, that poetry is inexpensive therapy! I have overcome many emotional nightmares just by "walking myself through it" with a poem....and ppsssttt....(motioning over) come a bit closer, and I'll let you in on a little secret.... ~~whispering~~I don't even need SEX anymore now that I write such detailed poems in Adult, and read what others write!.....he he he Talk about safe sex....'eh??  On a more serious note, I'm with LngJhnAg when he says he had to read it a time or two to get a feel for the style, but I enjoyed the challenge!! Such a very nice piece, and definately worth the extra effort to find the "beat" in it !! ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet [This message has been edited by poetFemmeFatale (edited 08-21-99).] |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
you amaze me sometimes.. ya know it? hehehe... ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
My views will certainly not abuse your trust since having read your poem I must say "It's fascinating." |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Quite a response to this piece, thanks all, though I'm sorry to say this is just the way it flows and I trust that you will find the time to follow more of my random rhyme. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
sounds like a good piece to take slammin!!!! |
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