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goodbye ocean

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mia
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0 posted 08-20-99 09:28 PM       View Profile for mia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for mia

My backyard
is full of tears
as the sky
keeps crying the ocean
my parents built
a new deck
behind my house
and I can sit for an hour
pondering on myself
selfish motives
I must leave
because I have always wanted here
to be there
somewhere other than this place
I keep coming back to
to drink the ocean
of tears
that the sky cries
as I let go
once more
of what might've been
if I would've stayed
So...
goodbye ocean
I give you the finger
I'll be back next summer
to drown myself once more
in your deepness
in your blue...
© Copyright 1999 mia - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 08-20-99 10:11 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

After 3 readings, the complexity of this piece comes to me. This is very well written, mia.
Alain DeLaCendres
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since 07-02-99
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2 posted 08-20-99 10:42 PM       View Profile for Alain DeLaCendres   Email Alain DeLaCendres   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alain DeLaCendres

This definately commands attention, I had to read it at least four times. Not because it was confusing, it was great. Hhhmm..I'm probably not making sense..This has so many emotions wven into it..it's amazing.

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Tout s'en va, tout passe, l'eau coule, et le couer oublie.
 
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