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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Rain On It’s raining out come and stay inside with me we can play. It’s raining out don’t leave now, I will miss you ~ you take your bow. It’s raining out you always clown, running to the car, pretending to drown. It’s raining out God’s a’crying, you’re not here, I’m a’sighing. It’s raining out you had to leave. I heard you turned, crashed and burned. It’s raining out streets were slick your tires skidded you passed quick. It’s raining out. My tears rain. You’ll never come back again. 20 August, 1999 ©KRJ ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
WOW!!! This one's sadness snuck up on me... great job! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
very sad |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Sad is not bad. Enjoyed the read. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
well done, Sunshine  ------------------ one night at the airport...Childhood Memories...your countenance...eight short weeks...My One and Only...hoarse whispers... What will it be?...break my heart...hour after hour...serving wench...take a guess...sink or swim...stolen hours...the mistress... companion...Perfection...a little girl...Mr. Jones...life is like...insomnia...devotion...too soon...07-20-69...craving...change... Master...apart...pride...plain...hush...then...D/s...shameless self-promotion [This message has been edited by elvira (edited 08-21-99).] |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
Sunshine, Well done. |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
Simply tragic. |
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Kelly Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 145 |
Very touching. I loved it. Thanks. |
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traveler Member
since 1999-08-17
Posts 119 |
Very moving Sunshine. Quite a turn. Smiled through the first stanzas, as it reminded me of "playing" ... then the shift to the loss ... very effective ... never take a day for granted .. thank you for your prose. [This message has been edited by traveler (edited 08-27-99).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you ALL so much. Again, this is another one that just "snuck up on me" as well. Your comments keep my Muse up at night! Thanks for reading. ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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