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Deb Lynne
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since 08-19-99
Posts 181
Where blue skies meet blue oce


0 posted 08-20-99 09:55 AM       View Profile for Deb Lynne   Email Deb Lynne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Deb Lynne

Deep inside there is a part
Of you that needs to know
What makes you act this way
What makes this feeling grow?

Why did it happen to you
And what did you do, you ask?
To find the answers that you seek
Will not be an easy task

Sometimes it happens just because
Cupid thought you needed a jolt
And sent an arrow full of love
Through your heart like a lightning bolt

It starts from a smile that warms your heart
And send shivers through your spine
Like you do when you look at me
And I know that you are mine

Don't worry yourself trying to answer
The questions that run through your head
Accept all that's been sent your way
And enjoy what you're feeling instead!


Deb Lynne '99


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elvira
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since 07-06-99
Posts 985
California


1 posted 08-20-99 06:08 PM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

i agree with you, Deb, sometimes it's better not to analyze our feelings and just let them take their course...though the same should be done with the negative/painful feelings, and that's the part most of us find troublesome
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


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I liked this one Deb....the rhyme was very true and in most places the rythym flowed nicely. My only suggestion is to delete a word on a few lines to smoothen the rythym up just a bit
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