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Goodbye

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DreamEvil
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0 posted 08-19-99 03:19 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

What gentle deceit does our passion prove?
Our song seems to be a dirge or lament.
We greet each other passionless and spent.
For you see, my heart you no longer move.

Why speak when I know you won't approve?
I have already endured your torment.
Your leaving me truly seems heaven sent.
Without you my life can only improve.

These words of mine were terrible to write.
Each of these things I felt a need to say.
I truly think my voice will go unheard.

Please don't think this was written out of spite.
It really wasn't meant to sound that way.
Something compelled me to write every word.


©1999 DreamEvil

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©




[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 08-19-99).]
© Copyright 1999 DreamEvil - All Rights Reserved
Nicole
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1 posted 08-19-99 03:28 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Definately something to say for closure! Simply put, and well said.

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"Grief can take care of itself, but to get the full value of joy you must have somebody to divide it with." *Mark Twain*
Dragoness
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2 posted 08-19-99 05:42 AM       View Profile for Dragoness   Email Dragoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dragoness's Home Page   View IP for Dragoness

I liked this one!

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.
LngJhnAg
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3 posted 08-19-99 06:44 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Dreamie - Is this a named style? I liked the way you slipped from one into the other, as if you were talking to someone, and then reflecting on what you said afterwards.
Gentle Soul
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4 posted 08-19-99 09:45 AM       View Profile for Gentle Soul   Email Gentle Soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Soul

wow love, this is great...

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WhtDove
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5 posted 08-19-99 10:21 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Today I can relate to this one! My voice does seem to go unheard!
DreamEvil
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6 posted 08-19-99 10:43 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

In truth, this is about the love I felt for the darkest part of my nature.
~one voice~
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7 posted 08-19-99 01:30 PM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

There comes a time in our lives when we all must say goodbye to a part of ourselves. Some have an easier time with it than others. You bring beauty to that part that will be gone forever, for we can never truly go back to being who we once were.

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."


Nan
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8 posted 08-19-99 06:16 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Nice Petrarchan (Italian) Sonnet format.... Darn - You always write on the dark side, ya know????
DreamEvil
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9 posted 08-20-99 05:57 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Thanks be to all that replied. It's true that I can't go back which is why I said Goodbye, wistfully but Goodbye nonetheless.

Nan, I write Dark because that is mostly all I know. I've had few pleasant experiences in life compared to the number that cause me pain. I will try to write a lighter piece once I perfect each format, just for you.
Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 08-20-99 10:10 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

DreamEvil,
A grey goodbye
But nicely done.
Poet deVine
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11 posted 08-20-99 10:22 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

The other day, someone brought one of your first postings up to the top of the heap. I read it again and saw that you have grown as a poet and a person since you first arrived. It seems to me that you have gotten better - you certainly are trying more styles! It shows that you care about your craft and it's presentation. Congratulations! (I liked this poem and hope your goodbye to that darker side of you is not too painful).
DreamEvil
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12 posted 08-20-99 02:06 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Now that, Lady deVine, is quite a compliment. I hope I continue to live up to it.
Rita
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13 posted 08-21-99 01:18 AM       View Profile for Rita   Email Rita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rita

i know how hard it is to spill your heart to a loved one whos heart is hardened and just turns away.

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"And the day came, where the risk to remain tight in a bud, was more painful than the risk it took to blossom"
 
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