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DreamEvil
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0 posted 08-19-99 01:27 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

The first breath of life fills me with wonder.
Gazing at them sets my heart all aglow.
Innocence tears my scarred heart asunder.
These feelings I am now able to show.

Gazing at them sets my heart all aglow.
On my mind tonight is a baby's scent.
These feelings I am now able to show.
It took my heart forever to relent.

On my mind tonight is a baby's scent.
Newborn babies seem to just draw me in.
It took my heart forever to relent.
Babies make each of my feelings deepen.

Newborn babies seem to just draw me in.
Cast by them is a very subtle spell.
Babies make each of my feelings deepen.
They adeptly drew me out of my shell.

Cast by them is a very subtle spell.
They love everyone just for who they are.
They adeptly drew me out of my shell.
Opening my heart, they left it ajar.

They love everyone just for who they are.
Innocence tears my scarred heart asunder.
Opening my heart, they left it ajar.
The first breath of life fills me with wonder.


©1999 DreamEvil

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©




[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 08-19-99).]
© Copyright 1999 DreamEvil - All Rights Reserved
wayoutwalt
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1 posted 08-19-99 01:29 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

very good dream i applaude the technique and the message is good
Alwye
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2 posted 08-19-99 01:30 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Beautifully done, Dream. I love babies..absolutely adore them. All children, actually.

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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood

Poet deVine
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3 posted 08-19-99 01:30 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Perfect. Loved it, DE.
Gentle Soul
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4 posted 08-19-99 01:39 AM       View Profile for Gentle Soul   Email Gentle Soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Soul

this is beautiful Dream! you write so well brother!

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Nicole
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5 posted 08-19-99 02:51 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Ah, the sweet innocence of babies. They remind us of that which is truly pure. Very well done, DE.

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"Grief can take care of itself, but to get the full value of joy you must have somebody to divide it with." *Mark Twain*
Dragoness
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6 posted 08-19-99 05:44 AM       View Profile for Dragoness   Email Dragoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dragoness's Home Page   View IP for Dragoness

Very sweet! Well written! You are the best brother!

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.
LngJhnAg
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7 posted 08-19-99 06:37 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Dreamie! A pantoum! And you didn't even warn us. Way to go, man. I liked the theme, although it doesn't seem to be you...yanno...not dark and DreamEvilly at all. Are you slipping? Have you "come over to the Light side, Luke?" Great subject. Great delivery.
Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 08-19-99 09:46 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

DreamEvil,
Don't know how I missed this wonderful pantoun. You are very talented.
WhtDove
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9 posted 08-19-99 10:17 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

LOL...LJA. This was wonderful! The innocence of children. How truthful they are, and don't see us for our shortcomings. Have lots of them Dream!!!!

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~one voice~
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10 posted 08-19-99 01:24 PM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Oh, to hold a newborn baby... *sigh* That's when one first learns the meaning of true love! Excellent pantoum... you've mastered the style.

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."


poetFemmeFatale
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11 posted 08-19-99 01:34 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

I'm with wayoutwalt here, I really liked the originality of your technique, you don't see that often, if ever ! Very nice piece.....Just remember, babies grow up to be little monsters !! LOL

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

Sunshine
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12 posted 08-19-99 01:45 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Very, very good.

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


Nan
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13 posted 08-19-99 06:48 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Not only a pantoum, but on the light side as well.....
DreamEvil
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14 posted 08-20-99 06:02 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

I aim to please, myself and others. My aim seems to be pretty good.
caroline
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15 posted 08-20-99 06:42 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

ahhhh babies...like holding a little rosebud in your hand. You've captured the feeling of seeing that new little face, and made me smile Thanks!

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
pen of passion
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16 posted 08-20-99 08:38 AM       View Profile for pen of passion   Email pen of passion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pen of passion

DE you are well deep-written man.
suthern
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17 posted 08-20-99 11:02 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Wonderful poem, DE! You definitely aimed well. *S*
Rita
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18 posted 08-21-99 01:30 AM       View Profile for Rita   Email Rita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rita

babies are wonderful, beautiful to observe. You show the wonder of a child, and grasp its first breath, and the purity of a child. the touch of their silken body, who can not love babies.

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"And the day came, where the risk to remain tight in a bud, was more painful than the risk it took to blossom"
IsabelleSkye
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19 posted 08-21-99 03:41 PM       View Profile for IsabelleSkye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for IsabelleSkye

a blonde haired, blue eyed little angel to hold your hand and call you Daddy...
*sigh*
well I want one too!(that's not a hint LOL)
BUT....she better call me Mommy *wink*
(btw this was lovely!)
Izzy
hoot_owl_rn
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20 posted 08-21-99 07:31 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Very nice Dream...I get the pleasure of seeing this on a daily basis...what better joy than new life
 
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