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Ridges - a really rare attempt at free verse |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion 
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Distant lines of geometry Tracing where my heart yearns Standing in line, waiting For me to receive their call. The first call, a whisper, Through pines, around cedars, Tempting me to the first ridge Where a symphony of yearning awaits. Standing there, I watch the mountains, Each named by others, Each knowing my name. Shhh. Can you hear them, too? I start down through the boughs, Until the only sound I hear, Is the sound of my own loneliness. The next ridge awaits, Just out of reach, But just within reach. Shhh. I think it's calling me again. Yes. The next ridge needs me, too. But now, the only ridges I see Are those of my past. The ridges call, But only for my youth. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
See - Here I am - I sat and waited until you posted so I could comment..... and it's good - You've got some pretty darned good imagery going for you.. very nice and then the sound of my own loneliness...... 'tis good....'tis good.....yep....  ------------------ Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done: For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits, Than I am sure I have in my whole five. ~ ²1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75 [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 08-18-99).] |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
nan - please oh please.... tell me this wasn't a pity-post. LOL - Thank you for your comments. looking forward to meeting the lil school amrm in September... I hope I can stifle my urge to corner you and get some free poetry lessons. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Giggling .....Hehehehe..... I finally have a man threatening to get me in a corner..... and all he wants from me are poetry lessons.....  ------------------ Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done: For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits, Than I am sure I have in my whole five. ~ ²1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75 |
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Lorelei54 Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 458 |
Nan..what ever you get out of this man..its worth waiting for...don't let him fool you with his words of needing lessons...he's a genuis in his own ways! |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
LngJhnAg, What a talent you have for the written word, splendid job, I liked it. |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
YES, YES, YES, YES. Free verse can be beautiful! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wonderful job, LJA! ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Well LJA, you know you'd never get a pity post from Belle! LOL. And I like it... good job, sailor! |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
If this is your first attempt, please write more free verse! The imagery is just lovely. I think you are good at this! ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
Oh, so cool. |
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