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tamlyn
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since 1999-08-18
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0 posted 1999-08-18 07:39 PM


the captive heart

Inside these walls around my heart
is still and dead, silent and dark
Doors are locked up fierce and tight
there is no sound this time of night

I stare up at the brooding moon
the distant stars cant fight the gloom
inside the glacial, bitter cold
passion sleeps within the soul

Emotion’s beast roams through these halls
inside my heart, inside these walls
Seeking comfort, craving touch
and never finding quie enough

Inside these walls, pain still attacks
a thousand memories fade to black
Silence rules the remnants of
this captive heart, untouched by love


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~tamlyn

© Copyright 1999 tamlyn - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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since 1999-05-20
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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
1 posted 1999-08-19 10:20 AM


Nice imagery - particularly in the second stanza....

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Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done:
For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits,
Than I am sure I have in my whole five.
~ ²1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75



Sue
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 383
France
2 posted 1999-08-19 04:00 PM


I love it; good flow, good imagery, good poem.
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