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The Jackal
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0 posted 08-18-99 06:42 PM       View Profile for The Jackal   Email The Jackal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for The Jackal

the wind whipped through my hair,
through my very soul,
it made me realize,
what I lost,
and what i could never regain,
as i stood on the brink of the unforgiven,
I looked down into blackness,
wished for it to envelope me,
but the light shone through,
the wind no longer blew,
and the voices that haunt me,
grew silent because they knew,
i was a beaten man,
and they had their revenge




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1 posted 08-19-99 01:57 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Jackal, you've describe how you feel, but not why. Could you expound on this a bit? I think may then grab the reader with a bit more force. What were you beaten by? Life? Love? Religion? Alcohol? A school kid? Why are you feeling sorry for yourself? Help!

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


 
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