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jfreak
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since 1999-06-17
Posts 306
Yuma, AZ, USA

0 posted 1999-08-18 01:08 AM


Listening ears are quite subtle
When the whining is so obtruse
Crying eyes see double
After tedious abuse
Idle hands are so much trouble
When left to those who have no clue
A rambling tongue is unlovable
When spite is all the vomit is spews

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Sally S.
Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847
Ohio
1 posted 1999-08-18 01:21 AM


Pretty powerful poem...and not a word wasted. Nice work j...

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"To waken doubt in one
Holding so fast by thine infinity;
So surely anchored on
The steadfast rock of immortality." ...Emily Bronte, "Last Lines"

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
2 posted 1999-08-18 01:31 AM


Wow, very interesting piece ! I agree with Sally, you sure know how to say alot with short & sassy lines !! (not really sassy - it's late & my vocabulary is tired...) Apologies... Short & firey, maybe? My spelling is Fuzzy too - um, is that how you spell "fire - ee" ? LOL

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet


jfreak
Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306
Yuma, AZ, USA
3 posted 1999-08-18 11:30 AM


Thanx guys so much. Hey Femme drink less coffee and get more sleep. *wink* I just put this poem together after reading some of the different poems on here. I have been in a poetical famine lately and I seem to have had a breakthrough. WooHOO!!!!

Jfreak

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
4 posted 1999-08-18 12:53 PM


What can I say? The words have already been spoken. Big things come in small packages!!!
blueloon
Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161
NY
5 posted 1999-08-18 01:10 PM


I believe that I have said this once before, "I love your work." I feel as if you have written what I can't, but truely think. If that makes any sense at all! Keep posting please!
blueloon

jfreak
Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306
Yuma, AZ, USA
6 posted 1999-08-18 05:48 PM


thank you all so very much. You humble me with your words. I am truly thankful.

Jfreak

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