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DarkChiild
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since 1999-08-09
Posts 18


0 posted 1999-08-18 01:06 AM


Betrayal
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It is the dying virtue
a betrayal yet to come
lost to me forever
al hope has come undone
an acronym for death
the soul's last dying breath
a name that's made to kill
the name does haunt me still
hence forth a word unspoken
for a word that's said in vein
the word forever broken
a word of double blame
for all I care
for all I dare
the word can sit and rust
for all that's left unspoken
there is no need for trust.


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Wish in one hand, then defecate in the other and see which one fills up first.

--DarkChiild--


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poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
1 posted 1999-08-18 01:18 AM


I REALLY like the way you get so much power & punch out of the short lines of rhyme and meter!! As always with your work, very unique & deep emotion - very nice way to vent anger !! Keep writing !

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet


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