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Ressurrection

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DarkChiild
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since 08-09-99
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0 posted 08-17-99 12:34 AM       View Profile for DarkChiild   Email DarkChiild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DarkChiild

In the recent past I broke up with my gf of 3 years.

Ressurrection
~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I thought it would never die
the inferno of dancing flame
yet now where there was once a heart
smoldering charcoal does remain
The water that was once so pure
that reflected a soul of gold
now reflect the stranger
of a soul already sold
Slowly you sucked out all the color
and left me here in grey
you have me hope then stole it
and left me to decay
But the ressurrection takes me
lifts me from the dirt
and I embrace it all
though still I remember all the hurt
So I hold her to my heart
and try to drown the pain
the coal has met it's match
for the flame does dance again
So I begin my descent anew
invite the agony yet to come
enjoying every moment
with the words "I love you" on my tounge.



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Wish in one hand, then shit in the other and see which one fills up first.

--DarkChiild--
© Copyright 1999 DarkChiild - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 08-17-99 07:39 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

And so you come full circle. Love - pain - love. Good poem, but I don't like your signature line...just a personal preference.
WhtDove
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2 posted 08-17-99 08:12 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Yes, I agree. It was a good poem! I liked the "sucked out all the color." That really added some emphasis.
Nan
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since 05-20-99
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3 posted 08-17-99 12:42 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I have to agree totally with deVine on this one - both on the poem and on the signature.
Would you kindly consider changing that?
Blondie
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since 08-06-99
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4 posted 08-17-99 02:11 PM       View Profile for Blondie   Email Blondie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Blondie

This poem is unique and brings a great rhythm across
great job!
 
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