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Lost Dreamer
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0 posted 08-16-99 11:38 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Can You See?

Can you see the mountains
in my soul?
The limitless oceans
in my heart?
Can you feel the butterflies
in my stomach,
as alone you do depart.

I climb these mountains
knowing you'll be there
to catch me,
if I happen to fall.
I sail these oceans
using our love,
as the vessel
to calm the tide.
I get these butterflies
at the times
that you can't see,
how your selfishness
buries me.

[This message has been edited by Lost Dreamer (edited 08-16-99).]
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poetFemmeFatale
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1 posted 08-17-99 11:31 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Very nice thought went into this....I like how it formed it's own little story......I'm sending this one back up.....keep writing!

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

Lost Dreamer
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2 posted 08-17-99 10:45 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

poetFemmeFatale: Thank-You for your response, glad you liked it.
Carolina Girl
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3 posted 08-17-99 10:47 PM       View Profile for Carolina Girl   Email Carolina Girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Carolina Girl

Very nice! I'm a nature lover...ocean, mountains...everything! Your words flowed wonderfully!
redwriter1
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since 07-22-99
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4 posted 08-17-99 10:54 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

I can't see the mountains, but I sure do feel the fireflies.. (oops.. butterflys) hehehe..

Love em.. and your poem..!

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Kay-lynn
**A dream is a wish your heart makes :)

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