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Old Man Rocking

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Lost Dreamer
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Old Man Rocking

Galloping on horseback
through the woods.
Sinking house
with shattered windows.
Old man rocking
on metal chair.
Waves,
as off into the distance
you ride.
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Sue
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1 posted 08-16-99 09:47 AM       View Profile for Sue   Email Sue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sue

A very lonely poem - I liked it.
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Sue: Thanks I wrote this as I was falling asleep last night.
elvira
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this poem has that certain something i can't quite put my finger on, considering i usually prefer rhyme, that means it must be extremely well done...hope you didn't fall asleep in that metal rocking chair?
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Elvira: Thank-You for your response, it means a lot since this style is not your favorite. I was thinking of a lonely old man living alone in the wilderness, and how often it seems no one would notice, as he wished they would.
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LD: I like your poem. It reminded me very much of one I wrote a long time ago called "Everyone Knows Her"... I think I'll post it! *G*
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Ah - I think I see him......
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Suthern: Thank-You for your response, I shall read yours also.

Nan: Your images are excellent.
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