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Lost Dreamer
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0 posted 1999-08-16 09:07 AM


Old Man Rocking

Galloping on horseback
through the woods.
Sinking house
with shattered windows.
Old man rocking
on metal chair.
Waves,
as off into the distance
you ride.

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Sue
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1 posted 1999-08-16 09:47 AM


A very lonely poem - I liked it.
Lost Dreamer
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2 posted 1999-08-16 09:58 AM


Sue: Thanks I wrote this as I was falling asleep last night.
elvira
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3 posted 1999-08-16 06:48 PM


this poem has that certain something i can't quite put my finger on, considering i usually prefer rhyme, that means it must be extremely well done...hope you didn't fall asleep in that metal rocking chair?
Lost Dreamer
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4 posted 1999-08-17 10:50 AM


Elvira: Thank-You for your response, it means a lot since this style is not your favorite. I was thinking of a lonely old man living alone in the wilderness, and how often it seems no one would notice, as he wished they would.
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5 posted 1999-08-17 11:31 AM


LD: I like your poem. It reminded me very much of one I wrote a long time ago called "Everyone Knows Her"... I think I'll post it! *G*
Nan
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6 posted 1999-08-17 01:04 PM


Ah - I think I see him......

Lost Dreamer
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7 posted 1999-08-17 10:23 PM


Suthern: Thank-You for your response, I shall read yours also.

Nan: Your images are excellent.

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