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Terri
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0 posted 1999-08-16 04:25 AM


The man stood forlorn, looking tattered and torn
The ship rail gripped tight in his hands
As he stared 'cross the bay, in hushed voice did he say
"Fare thee well to ye, sweet Ireland"

He then turned to me, in his eyes I did see
A man who was filled with despair.
He started to speak as a tear crossed his cheek
Soft ocean breeze tousling his hair.

"Back there, it is said, that I killed a man dead
Tis a lie but I daern't take a stand
For it was me dear wife who had wielded th'knife
To the taxman who'd take all our land."

"So now must I roam, travel far from me home.
To protect her, I'll do what I can.
I'll sail all the seas but m'heart won't be free
For it's there, in fair Ireland
Fare thee well to ye, sweet Ireland"




[This message has been edited by Terri (edited 08-16-99).]

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Sue
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1 posted 1999-08-16 05:15 AM


A lovely poem, Terri. Somehow it epitomises loss and homesickness. It's so good that I think it would be worthwhile to have another look at line 15 - it's just not quite up to the standard of the rest.
elvira
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2 posted 1999-08-16 08:56 AM


assume the spelling is intentional...a sad yet lovely tale, Terri
Saxoness
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3 posted 1999-08-16 09:37 AM


This Irish lass thought it was beautiful!

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot



Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 1999-08-16 09:44 AM


Terri,
I've been to Ireland many times
They say it has 40 shades of green
and it's true.

A beautiful poem and it says loads.

Terri
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5 posted 1999-08-16 11:30 AM


Sue--you were right! I gave it a nudge and I think it flows better now. Many thanks!

Elvira--after a couple of edits, any misspellings NOW are intentional..LOL!

Saxoness--thank you! That is such a lovely quote...and how appropriate.

Seymour--How I envy you! Someday, somehow, I WILL get there.
My thanks to you all

Sue
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6 posted 1999-08-16 03:32 PM


Terri, a really great improvement! Thank you for listening, and thank you for letting me know. Just for that I'm sending you back to the top.
skyshine
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7 posted 2006-03-18 01:37 AM


It's heartbreaking when somebody's home is torn apart by tragedy. In this day, age, and land, we all have so much to be thankful for.

~sky

I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying....
~Tim McGraw

dollmaker
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8 posted 2006-09-08 06:44 PM


i think that poem was lovely my mother's dad came from ireland. lovely poem. great job.from dollmaker


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