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Uncertainity

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MEGAN
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0 posted 08-16-99 02:27 AM       View Profile for MEGAN   Email MEGAN   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for MEGAN

What to do?
She sits just feeling blue.
Inside lies hurt and pain,
for she feels she has nothing to gain.
Each day she tries and tries,
but here her body just lies.
Tonite she thinks and hopes,
but like her life, there's no end to her rope.
Will there ever be light?
For she knows she is really bright.
A happy time she tries to remember,
but her mind, heart, and body just trembles.
Her body and soul she hates.
She is stuck behind a lock gate.
She knows and will go on.
Maybe not with a smile, but rather a frown.
Her hurt and emptiness grows immensly.
Her love keeps weakening densly.
Will there ever be an end?
For now she has lost her true friend.
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MEGAN
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since 08-16-99
Posts 17
Cottonwood, Ca United States


1 posted 08-16-99 03:05 AM       View Profile for MEGAN   Email MEGAN   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for MEGAN

For whoever reads this, please give me feedback.. I know it isn't that great, but it is one of my shortest one I had, and I didn't have much time to post on here, but i would greatly appreciate it if someone would give me feedback.. Thanx!!!
elvira
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Welcome to the forums, Megan... for constructive criticism, try posting in "critical analysis



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