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The Fine Line

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Lost Dreamer
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0 posted 08-15-99 09:51 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lost Dreamer

The Fine Line

I crossed the line
with you
now I'm falling
in despair.
I purposely chose
the fine line
now I sit like a corpse
in this chair.
I blast myself
for thinking
you could,
or would change.
Being a sponge,
and a conniver
is your only
visible range.
You wiped away
all of my kindness,
now you expect more.
I feel like a hostage
agonizing
all the whys,
and why-nots
of human reflectiveness.
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Sue
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1 posted 08-15-99 11:19 AM       View Profile for Sue   Email Sue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sue

I read this several times, I think it is worth learning by heart. It is beautifully written and so, so recognisable for me.
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 08-15-99 11:46 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Lost dreamer, this one is not lost on me. Good one.
Lost Dreamer
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3 posted 08-15-99 01:07 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Sue: Thank You for your response. I wrote this about my brother-in-law who I keep thinking will change.

Seymour Tabin: Thank You for your response, it's much appreciated.
Balladeer
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4 posted 08-15-99 01:39 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Dreamer, you have a wonderful ability to pack a lot of emotion in few words. It is a gift and you excel in it.
WhtDove
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Very well done! I have been there, hoping a change would come! Some people tho'- never know!
Lost Dreamer
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Balladeer: Thank You so much for the compliment, I just write as I feel, I guess sometimes it really comes across.

WhtDove: Thank You for your compliment, one day maybe I will learn, and spread my energies in a more apprecitive direction.
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