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Matt
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since 1999-08-15
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Newport, South wales, UK

0 posted 1999-08-15 07:12 AM


When I saw you standing there
The wind blowing freely through your hair
That untroubled smile gracing your face
Denying me the power to flee this place

Comparing you to a mere earthly flower
Doesn’t expose your beauty’s full power
You should be compared to a heavenly star
At least that states just what you are

So forgive me now if I’m bothering you
I always hoped you loved me too
I only wanted a chance to stay
Alongside you and wash the tears away

So remember me as you walk away
As all I do is sit here and cry
As you live enjoying yourself
I’m having trouble saying goodbye

I was born to love you!


[This message has been edited by Matt (edited 08-16-99).]

© Copyright 1999 Matt - All Rights Reserved
Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
1 posted 1999-08-15 09:09 AM


Matt, Very nice job, I love the last line "I was born to love you"
Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 1999-08-15 12:08 PM


Matt, I've read stuff like this before, but you did a good job.
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
3 posted 1999-08-15 12:11 PM


Welcome sir to the family! If you use the edit button (with the pen) you can change this line:
I always hoped you loved myme? too

Nicely done! I loved your way with words here..'denying me the power to flee'..great phrase!


thursdayschild
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since 1999-07-01
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Houston, Tx.
4 posted 1999-08-15 09:54 PM


How could any woman resist
a declaration such as this?
Nice Matt....

DarkChiild
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since 1999-08-09
Posts 18

5 posted 1999-08-16 12:59 PM


I envy you.. I'm miserable at writing the mushy stuff. But good job, it was well expressed


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Wish in one hand, then shit in the other and see which one fills up first.


Nan
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6 posted 1999-08-16 08:07 AM


This is very nicely done, Matt...Keep 'em coming...
passing shadows
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displaced
7 posted 2004-04-18 04:39 AM


nicely done...very romantic!
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