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Ron
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0 posted 08-15-99 03:58 AM       View Profile for Ron   Email Ron   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Ron's Home Page   View IP for Ron

This poem goes back several months, before these forums became a reality, to what seems like a life-time ago. In another forum, smaller than this one but filled with the same sense of camaraderie, three wonderful people harangued me with flattery and nudged me to write more. This poem, using quotes from their posts, was my answer.


A Gathering of Threads



I saw a daft woman aside the road
Sacrificing her coat on bended knees,
Bravely braving the Phoenix cold -
A victim, it seemed, of rhymer's disease.

With amazing traces of deified faces,
And a rhyme scheme not easily ignored,
In quatrain litanies of Hallmark phrases,
She argued, "Virtue is its own reward."

Imagine my cry, when out of the sky,
From the Sunshine came an answering rhyme.
In meter it spoke, with question replied
Softly, "You do this all in your spare time?"

With eyes now a'tear, my heart full of cheer,
Of my gratitude I softly told her.
Then a sense of genius I felt grow near,
And a hearty hand fell to my shoulder.

Draped in gray robes of unspoken hopes,
His voice spoke in verse of quieter times,
When worthy words were more easily wrote
And we shared, as friends, our favorite rhymes.

I nodded my head at the words he said,
In my heart knowing I couldn't decline
To follow his path where ever it led,
As he added, "Kick down with a fresh line."

I gathered my friends in digital arms,
My smiles growing at the simple request.
If patience be virtue, what be the harm
Of simply trying my digital best?





The victim of rhymer's disease, the Sunshine that so often responds in verse, and the genius in robes of unspoken hope are all here, amonst you. Can you guess who they might be?


© Copyright 1999 Ron Carnell - All Rights Reserved
~one voice~
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1 posted 08-15-99 04:02 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

ummm... you, Nan, Poet deVine.... etc... hehehe Wonderful poem, Ron! I would like to think that this family here is made up of "threads" that add to this "spool!" Okay, it's too early in the morning to be philosophical... Any way, great piece! I like it a lot!

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."


Ron
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2 posted 08-15-99 04:08 AM       View Profile for Ron   Email Ron   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ron's Home Page   View IP for Ron

I am not one of the three.

Guesses should be more specific, too. Based on their posts here, who is represented by each of the characters mentioned? The clues are, as always, in their words (and images - there's a hint for you!).

(And thanks - glad you liked it one voice!)

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3 posted 08-15-99 04:11 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

You're welcome, Ron. I was just teasin' ya... I will read it again tomorrow when I can think more clearly... I'm very tired. After some much needed sleep, I will have an answer for you! (oh, thanks for the hints!)

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."


Michael
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4 posted 08-15-99 04:28 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Hi Ron,
Glad to see you but gads what are you doing up at this hour? Liked this piece before - nice to see it posted here.

Michael
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5 posted 08-15-99 04:44 AM       View Profile for Ron   Email Ron   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ron's Home Page   View IP for Ron

Don't laugh, Michael (though you have every right to do so ), but I have a mild case of bronchitis and slept my day away in a drug-crazed state. I'm enjoying the ability to think clearly again while it lasts...

Glad you enjoyed the post. I've been waiting for the opportunity and am very glad it is now appropriate.
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6 posted 08-15-99 05:05 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

What are we doing up at this hour?

Ron, sorry to hear you're not feeling well. Perhaps a little chicken soup for the soul would help?

No matter who posts a poem here, it's always a treat to read something from you. You have gathered some wonderful threads and made a digital coat of many colors here on the internet. (I'm not implying that you are God, not the God but a god!

Smile and feel better soon!
Michael
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7 posted 08-15-99 05:13 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

I am also glad, Ron. Thanks.
BTW - check your email if you're still on-line.

I just wanted to say hello to Poet Devine
also.

Seems sleep is highly overrated, huh?


Michael
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Geesh - A girl tries to get a little sleep around here - at a reasonable hour for sleep, no less - and you guys are partying without me... Why didn't someone wake me up????


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Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done:
For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits,
Than I am sure I have in my whole five.
~ ²1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75      



[This message has been edited by Nan (05-01-2003 08:35 PM).]

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9 posted 08-15-99 12:06 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Ok, ok...enough chit chat...let's get this puzzle solved!
LngJhnAg
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10 posted 08-15-99 12:13 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

OK - I know this may sound like conceit,
But I'm either the coat or the wet street.
As for the poets Ron kept in disguise,
There're so many in here, I'll mute my replies.

Ron - nice little bit of thread weaving there. The tapestry grows as we each learn new knots and stitches. A steadying hand serves well the master and the apprentice.
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11 posted 08-19-99 02:22 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Oh my Lord, I just found this one
and my heart leaped when I read about "Sun"
could it be me? I thought with a gasp
then thought of all the poets, and fell in relapse.

I see our great lady Poet DeVine,
for she writes ever so, "just fine"
and for some reason the gray robed guy
to me has to be Balladeer, albeit refined.

So, lest my hopes be forthwith bashed in
I'll sit back and await your chuckling grin
For you to tell me who the third one is,
and name the real "sunshine" within!

19 August, 1999
İKRJ


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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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12 posted 08-19-99 03:53 PM       View Profile for MissNTrope   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for MissNTrope

The three named here Know who they are.....
Don't miss that opening line, for it's a clue. This poem goes back several months, before these forums existed. Who could these three poets be? Think about it
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13 posted 08-21-99 11:28 AM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blueloon

I found this puzzle to be quite charming! I read and re-read over and over for what felt like an hour! I think I got the answer just please tell me if I am right: Ms.DeVine, Balladeer, and last but not least the sunshine of all Nan!
blueloon
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14 posted 08-21-99 11:39 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Ron,
Not one for puzzles, but I liked the poem.
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No one has guessed correctly yet!
Temptress
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16 posted 08-21-99 03:15 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

Forgive me for being the tardy one, but I don't hang out here often because my mind is mostly in the gutter of the Adult Forum..LOL! Just kidding if that offends anyone. *Big smiles*
So..I am going to guess..


The one on bended knee, Phoenix, and offering of coat= The excellent PoetDevine.

The Sunshine= Who else but Nan!! Where has she been lately?

The robed one=Micheal.

*Of course, I may have some unfair advantage here.
Michael
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17 posted 10-26-1999 02:15 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Jeeze, Ron,
I was fishing back here and look what I found...you never told anyone the answer, and well you know me, I couldn't let that go now could I?

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?




[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 10-26-1999).]
Ron
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18 posted 10-28-1999 05:03 PM       View Profile for Ron   Email Ron   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ron's Home Page   View IP for Ron

Temptress cheated!

But, of course, she was completely accurate. Oh, and her "unfair advantage" was that she happened to be there at the time...
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19 posted 06-12-2007 05:30 PM       View Profile for Drauntz   Email Drauntz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Drauntz

beautiful. have no hint who is who because I am here in a very short time. the poem is very good.

and I wish that you had recovered from your
bronchitis.

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20 posted 11-12-2007 09:18 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Beautiful poem Ron

ARCTIC WIND
 
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