How to Join Member's Area Private Library Search Today's Topics p Login
Main Forums Discussion Tech Talk Mature Content Archives
   Nav Win
 Archives
 Open Poetry #1 Archive
 Madmen on the Loose...
 1 2 3 4 5 6
Follow us on Facebook

 This is an Archive. You may post a reply, but new topics are not allowed.

 
User Options
Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Admin Print Send ECard
Passions in Poetry

Madmen on the Loose...

 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
Carolina Girl
Member
since 08-14-99
Posts 65


0 posted 08-14-99 01:18 PM       View Profile for Carolina Girl   Email Carolina Girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Carolina Girl

Why?

Watching them cross
Hand in hand
Sent chills down my spine
as tears rolled down my cheeks.
Another madman gone wild
In the city of LA.
The children did no wrong.
This poor excuse for a human
Taking their lives into his own hands.
Bloody cold hands.
Then to hear the question asked
On the Today show...
"Is this Y2K related?"
Fear overcame my useless mind and body.
Is this it?
Is this the beginning
Of a Global Meltdown,
Of morals, values, and mankind????
I cry for the children.
I cry for their loss of innocence, carefree spirit,
and childhood.
Lost in a world filling with
more hate, each and every day.
I want to close my eyes and sleep.
Sleep no more
Only to be awakened by reality
Of madmen running rampant
in our society.
© Copyright 1999 Carolina Girl - All Rights Reserved
poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite
since 07-25-99
Posts 2961
Arkansas


1 posted 08-17-99 11:43 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

This is such a powerful little piece, and I can't believe you didn't get not one reply ! I like to go through the poems with no replies, and see if I can see what the writer had to say - and wow, This is a very moving epic!! I've read your poems, and know they're good - may I suggest something - a different title to catch the reader's eye and make them want to read it? Examples: Madmen on the loose - or maybe Global Warming with madness - - - something that will cause a scrolling reader to stop and check it out!! Your poems are definately worthy to be read, but this is something I learned here.....the title is what catches the attention FIRST.....Try it, you'll probably acquire a fan club fast!! ~~kisses

------------------
- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean
since 07-07-99
Posts 32119
Tamarac Fla


2 posted 08-17-99 12:22 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Carolina Girl,
I'm afraid PFF is right. Take her suggestion
I enjoy your writing and think you have talent.
Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 05-20-99
Posts 24426
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA


3 posted 08-17-99 01:51 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

CG - You work is, indeed, good - If you want to change a title, you'll need to contact me. You can edit your own text, but only moderators can delete or change title lines...
Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 05-20-99
Posts 24426
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA


4 posted 08-17-99 10:24 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan



------------------
Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done:
For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits,
Than I am sure I have in my whole five.
~ 1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75


Carolina Girl
Member
since 08-14-99
Posts 65


5 posted 08-17-99 10:29 PM       View Profile for Carolina Girl   Email Carolina Girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Carolina Girl

I tell you what...this site has to have the BEST and most EFFICIENT moderators on the web! You guys are great!!!! Thank you!!
Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 05-26-99
Posts 25869
Hurricane Alley


6 posted 08-18-99 01:06 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I'm going to be honest here - first I love the poem - second, when you first started posting, you put about 6 new poems onto the forum at once...I read a couple as I try to get the newbies on their first day and welcome them. I could not read all 6 at that time..it's unfortunate that this happens a lot....the poems move so quickly here - wait until you hear how many people access the site! It's hard to stop and read each poem and sometimes, gems get lost in the shuffle.
That's why it's also a good idea, once in awhile, to go back a few pages and find the poems that no one responded to and read them, if you like them, reply and send it to the top for us to find...as PFF did.

Your work is great, by the way. It's exciting to see so much talent here!
 
 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
All times are ET (US) Top
  User Options
>> Archives >> Open Poetry #1 >> Madmen on the Loose... Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Print Send ECard

 

pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Today's Topics | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary



© Passions in Poetry and netpoets.com 1998-2013
All Poetry and Prose is copyrighted by the individual authors