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Carolina Girl
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since 1999-08-14
Posts 63


0 posted 1999-08-14 01:14 PM


Without Your Love

Can I survive day to day
without your love to pave the way?
Just waking each morning is hard to do
And wondering if you have the same problem, too.
It's getting harder as I try not to think
if I made the right choice to swim or sink.
Life's not the same as it was before
you took my heart, and yours I tore.
You didn't even give me a reason to doubt
Now because of impatience we both missed out.
And I can't help but wonder what could have been
of our undying love, what it could have meant.
Guess we'll both never know, you took the coward's way out
By not saying a word, just left with a pout.
I'm the one who's left with an empty place you left
While you're going on, new women you've probably met.
I hope when you look at them, deep and thoroughly through
you see some of what was me, what you always knew
I honestly loved you from the very start
It was hopefully for the best that we decided to part.
But please come back, briefly, just please return my heart.

© Copyright 1999 Carolina Girl - All Rights Reserved
elvira
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since 1999-07-06
Posts 936
California
1 posted 1999-08-14 11:37 PM


will this one do? ...don't get me wrong, we can all relate to a broken heart, Carolina Girl
Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
2 posted 1999-08-16 12:35 PM


Yes, we can all certainly relate...exellent job.

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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood

DarkChiild
Junior Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 18

3 posted 1999-08-16 12:48 PM


well written. I'm impressed. I can relate though, not too long ago I broke up with my gf of 3 yrs. It sucks for a long time, and I don't think the pain ever goes away entirely. But you alwayz come out a little better in the end. Just think of the good stuff, and remember him for the person you loved.

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Wish in one hand, then shit in the other and see which one fills up first.


DarkChiild
Junior Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 18

4 posted 1999-08-16 12:48 PM


well written. I'm impressed. I can relate though, not too long ago I broke up with my gf of 3 yrs. It sucks for a long time, and I don't think the pain ever goes away entirely. But you alwayz come out a little better in the end. Just think of the good stuff, and remember him for the person you loved.

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Wish in one hand, then shit in the other and see which one fills up first.


DarkChiild
Junior Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 18

5 posted 1999-08-16 12:48 PM


well written. I'm impressed. I can relate though, not too long ago I broke up with my gf of 3 yrs. It sucks for a long time, and I don't think the pain ever goes away entirely. But you alwayz come out a little better in the end. Just think of the good stuff, and remember him for the person you loved.

------------------
Wish in one hand, then shit in the other and see which one fills up first.


MEGAN
Junior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 17
Cottonwood, Ca United States
6 posted 1999-08-16 03:41 AM


great poem!!! I know what it feels like.. Just recently me and my brother broke up, but he did it just the way you describe, by not saying anything and taking my heart with him... Keep up the great talent you have within you.
MEGAN
Junior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 17
Cottonwood, Ca United States
7 posted 1999-08-16 03:42 AM


I am sorry in my previous reply, where it says brother, i meant to say boyfriend.. sorry i just got done talking to my brother about it, and i guess he was still on my mind
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