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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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The schoolmarm and the pastor Led such a sheltered life. He said "Hello" on Sundays; She longed to be his wife. And anything to please him Was not too much to ask. She'd pull down the stars for him And in his praises bask. She had once been a loving soul Showed that side to a few. But as she watched her hero She knew that wouldn't do. So she became judgmental, Critical of every flaw. Whatever might find his favor Became the schoolmarm's law. She pointed out each person's sins Her words were most unkind. But to the changes in herself The old maid was quite blind. All she knew was that he smiled At her and gave a bow. So she became an expert At holier-than-thou. She built a comfy little nest On spirits she had broken As she waited for those words The pastor left unspoken. One day the pastor took a bride And shocked more than a few. He warned her of the schoolmarm: "Be careful of that shrew." |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Just goes to show ya! It's not the liquor or the drugs that pass into your mouth...it's what comes out.....and another thing.....Ya see?...If she was doing that to someone like me....she wouldn't have been able to find a single solitary "flaw?"....course....Pastor Toerag doesn't really have a "ring" to it does it?....Reverend Toerag?...Nope.....Parsons Toe?.....Nope...I may couldda been a nun?....Sister Toe? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Toerag: Now sweets.... you know you're not quite perfect. *G* There is that patience thing... or lack thereof! LOL. But I like Reverend Toerag... I certainly revere you! *G* (Brother Toerag won't do... I don't feel at all sisterly towards you! LOL.) I do wonder at those who live to condemn others... it would be nice to take a peek and see what St. Peter has to say to them! *G* |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
enjoyable poem, suthern  |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Suthern, this is a wonderful poem, well written and with a good message to it. It boggles the mind to think how good you could be without that unspeakable, evil influence hanging over you! Please write more. I really enjoy your style! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, this is a wonderful poem, with a message. |
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Lorelei54 Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 458 |
Kudo's to you Mistress Suthern' I know that you are not A schoolmarm or a shrew But this poem tells me What more you ought to do. Write poems sweet lady. This is great. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Was he a Suthern Baptist?.... Very nicely done, I say!!! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Belle You really messed up this time. You let your talent a wee bit too far out of the bag. Now, we all will expect more, and you will no longer be able to sit by silently without urgings from us. This was a really well-structured poem with a terrific moral. I loved how quickly and smoothly I found myself at the last line. Reading poetry, it seems to me, should be pleasurable and uplifting. You've done both for me in this poem. (If Redwriter happens to come by this way, don't believe a word you read about my "kitty" poem.) |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
You've given a very light touch to a pretty heavy moral. Well done! |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Man, gives food for thought, doesn't it. Good poetry - wonderful lesson. A |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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