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Every Step

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Lost Dreamer
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0 posted 08-14-99 06:24 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Every Step

I walk,
and walk,
and walk,
oblivious
to my
surroundings.
Every step
further
from reality.
Every step
a minute
of time gone.
Every step
I took
for you.
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Nan
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I think we've all taken some of those steps in our lifetime....
pandora
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2 posted 08-14-99 11:48 AM       View Profile for pandora   Email pandora   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pandora

I like the lines "Every stop/ a minute/ of time gone". Step right up to the mike, LD, your voice is loud and clear. In a few short words, you've expressed anger, pain, heartache and gave the reader a glimpse into your heart. Nice one. I like the length of it, too.
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Nan: Thanks for your response, I was feeling kind of down when I wrote this, like
pandora recognized.

pandora: Thank-you also for your response, Your perception was right on.
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So much emotion expressed in so few words.
Good work, I understand those weary feet.
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thursdayschild: Thank You, your compliment is appreciated.
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