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Balladeer
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0 posted 08-13-99 10:44 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

"My Lord", the Queen said, "by your leave I've written down a rhyme
And would be proud for you to comment on, should you have time.
I've woven quite a tapestry of images that sing
A message that I feel would be befitting for a king."

"A rhyme?", the King said. "Lady, there is nothing I hate worse
Than silly little couplets forced together into verse!
Pure prose alone is strong enough to make a message clear
And not this childish ditty that you dare to offer here."

Just then the castle doors sprung wide and, entering from the night,
A young man rushed, quite out of breath with features full of fright.
"My King!", he cried. "The armies of our foes are on the march!
They're pillaging the villages with saber, lance and torch."

"Our legions need men and supplies. Please do not hesitate
Or, by this time tomorrow, they'll be at the castle gate!"
The King reacted quickly. Reinforcements were dispatched
And, by the eve, the tide had turned...the danger met and matched.

That evening in the royal bed, the Queen quite sweetly, said
"That boy who warned us of the fight-was his hair blond...or red?"
"What's this?", replied the King. "What nonsense do I hear from you?"
"That boy", she said, "who came today. Were his eyes brown...or blue?"

"Was his body big and strong...or was it rather small?
Were his features pale or sunburned? Did you find him short or tall?
Did you spy rings on his fingers or a chain around his neck?
When he moved, did he bend down a bit or did he stand erect?"

"My Queen, you've truly gone insane to ask such foolish things.
I care not if he had ORANGE eyes...or if he wore TEN rings!
I care not how he walked...care not what color horse he mounted!
The boy held no signifigance - the message was what counted!"

"My lord", the Queen said, "by your leave, I've written down a rhyme
And would be proud for you to comment on, should you have time......"
The King smiled. In his eye, a humorous twinkle could be seen.
He said, "I am a lucky man to have such a wonderous Queen."




© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
RainbowGirl
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1 posted 08-13-99 10:49 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Indeed he is, Balladeer...:-))

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.



[This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 08-13-99).]
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 08-13-99 10:53 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

As usual I enjoyed the poem and the story kept me going till the end. And that was quite an end.
Nan
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3 posted 08-13-99 11:11 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Such an intricately woven extended metaphor, my friend..... He certainly is a lucky King to have such a sagacious Queen by his side.... We all need little reminders sometime - of those basic truths in life...

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Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done:
For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits,
Than I am sure I have in my whole five.
~ 1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75


Artur Hawkwing
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4 posted 08-13-99 11:28 PM       View Profile for Artur Hawkwing   Email Artur Hawkwing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artur Hawkwing

A very clever poem written by a clever man. To those argumentative rhymists and free-versers, remember the lesson here...

quote:
the message was what counted!


No more than the poem is the boy, and no more than the meaning is the message.
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5 posted 08-14-99 12:04 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Thank you all.

Yes, we do, Nan.

Artur....awesome response..thank you.
Poet deVine
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6 posted 08-14-99 12:11 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

A wondrous poem as befitting a Balladeer! Excellent sir!
Delores Hall
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7 posted 08-14-99 12:14 AM       View Profile for Delores Hall   Email Delores Hall   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Delores Hall

If we could all be as good as you.
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Great work Sir..You inspire me..

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"No one was ever ruined from without;
The final ruin comes from within." Amelia E. Barr


Sally S.
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9 posted 08-14-99 12:34 AM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

How very clever! I enjoy your work so...
You always seem to send a message in your poetry...that's masterful, indeed.
Nicole
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10 posted 08-14-99 01:26 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Your message rings loud and clear, and should be heard by all! Well done, as always!

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"Grief can take care of itself, but to get the full value of joy you must have somebody to divide it with." *Mark Twain*
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11 posted 08-14-99 04:52 AM       View Profile for Cinderella   Email Cinderella   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cinderella

You are my idol "balladeer" the way you make words so glorious to read!
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12 posted 08-14-99 08:03 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Your lesson was well-taught, Sir Balladeer.

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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13 posted 08-14-99 10:32 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

'Deer

You know - you drive me crazy at times. This was a terrific poetic metaphor. Where DO you get these great ideas? I sit staring out the window as if, in the distance, an idea will come and awaken in me some small amount of inspiration. And, here you are, seemingly whipping out one great idea after another as if it was something everybody does. It isn't - be assured - not everybody does it, because I am the exception to the rule.
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14 posted 08-14-99 04:33 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Thank you all, good friends.

Long John, no matter how long it takes you to whip one out, it is always well worth the wait! Good to hear from you.
Craig
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If Id have written this Id be ecstatic ( and probably dreaming ), reading it is no less enjoyable.
Thank you for sharing this.
Fred Hobbs
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Outstanding Balladeer! Lots of us can rhyme but few can weave a story like that.

sandman
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17 posted 08-15-99 02:22 AM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

well done, as always, Balladeer *curtsies*
Terri
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18 posted 08-15-99 02:40 AM       View Profile for Terri   Email Terri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Terri

Your words are like bright colors
A true master of your art
And oh, the glorious pictures
You have painted in my heart


While you're at it, would you mind giving my Muse a swift kick? I think she doth lay dreaming.


[This message has been edited by Terri (edited 08-16-99).]
aziza
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19 posted 06-10-2007 07:31 PM       View Profile for aziza   Email aziza   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aziza

I love this.
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20 posted 11-10-2007 09:48 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
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21 posted 07-30-2008 05:12 AM       View Profile for latearrival   Email latearrival   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for latearrival

Another grand find. You are missed around here. "late"
 
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