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The Jackal
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0 posted 08-13-99 09:55 PM       View Profile for The Jackal   Email The Jackal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for The Jackal

its beating on my mind again,
where is the hollow friend,
i want that craving,
makes me feel small,
thrown around someones rag doll,
but im in heaven,
hell's release,
no more chains,no more leash,
i can breathe,and im alive,
nothing kicking me inside,
the power of love,
has found me dead




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doreen peri
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1 posted 08-13-99 10:11 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

Welcome to the forums. I don't think I've seen your post before...

This is a dynamic piece. I particularly like the phrase "beating on my mind again". Other lines stand out for me, also: "but I'm in heaven/hell's release" and the last lines, "the power of love/has found me dead"

Very interesting and powerful work. Thanks for posting. I'll look forward to reading more.

-dp
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