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Andrew Scott
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0 posted 1999-08-13 05:40 PM


A dream within a dream within
With no beginning and with no end

Where does it start
This world apart
That we live while we sleep
Is it real
The things we feel
This other life we keep

Could they be
These worlds we see
Only images to our mind
Or is it true
For me and you
Another life entwined

A world within a world within
The veil of reality dreamily thin

Where one lies down to take its end
The other seeks a life within

© Copyright 1999 Andrew Scott - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 1999-08-13 06:06 PM


A conundrum! I like this poem very much..makes you think.

~one voice~
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2 posted 1999-08-13 06:50 PM


Wow, Mr. Scott! Just what I was thinking about... hehehe... I truly enjoyed this piece of artwork! Quite a talented fellow you are!

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."



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3 posted 1999-08-13 06:59 PM


Very artistically crafted, Mr. Scott, and well spoken.
poohbear
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4 posted 1999-08-13 07:56 PM


youching and intriguing as always , enjoy reading your work it's imspiration for us all.
Andrew Scott
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5 posted 1999-08-13 08:03 PM


Most deVine One: That my words make one think is the highest praise, and it is magnified ten fold coming from you. Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed.

One Voice: I've enjoyed many of your's in turn and I thank you for using the term "artwork." You are most kind.

Balladeer: I can not thank you enough for your kind responses. I consider you to be one of the most talented within these poetic halls, and that you have consistantly left your mark upon my postings is great encouragement to this rookie. (PS, I'm glad you liked the Bal series. It was fun while it lasted.)

Poohbear: My pleasure to do so. Thanks for stopping by... I'll try to keep the honey jars filled.
I'm headed for vacation, so I'll be out all next week. I fear what I'll miss in that time. Thanks again, one and all.

[This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (edited 08-13-99).]

doreen peri
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6 posted 1999-08-13 08:30 PM


I particularly liked the first and 4th stanza, Andrew. Actually, I think they could stand alone as a seperate piece. This is very thought provoking and delves into a realm of curiosity which makes me feel alive! Thanks for sharing. Nice job.
Nan
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7 posted 1999-08-14 09:01 AM


This is terrific - I can't even choose a verse that I like best - except perhaps the finale.... Nice work, my friend....

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Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done:
For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits,
Than I am sure I have in my whole five.
~ ²1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75



Andrew Scott
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8 posted 1999-08-14 05:36 PM


doreen Peri: Thank you so very much. In a way I wrote the first and fourth stanzas as one and then I seperated them with two and three to accentuate the point of not knowing where dreams and reality leave off from one another. Thanks for noticing.

Nan: Your praise is a coin I value most dearly. That you enjoyed my offering makes it all the more special to me. Thank you.

elvira
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9 posted 1999-08-14 09:23 PM


well done indeed, Andrew
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