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Eden (For Pandora)

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Michael
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0 posted 08-13-99 10:09 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael

EDEN

There's a smile lost across the gloss-
Of a most weary, teary eye.
And there's a dream beneath the gleam-
Unseen, unsought, aching to fly.
A child, dear child, somewhere searching-
For the understanding of the wise.
Easily mistaken and forsaken-
In a world of vast and ghastly lies.

A soul yearning, bleeding, burning,
Blinded by its own innocence;
Wanders and strays, dies and decays-
In the garden of decadence.
Where blossoms bloom beneath the gloom-
Of a loomy, lazy willow that whines.
Where the water stills, and the cold wind chills,
And no one's ever really seen the sun shine.

For shadows play throughout the day-
Just to wither away the hour.
As the worst and best die on the quest-
For the touch of a mystical flower.
And the night sky glows just beyond rows-
Of luminous flowers, a thousandfold.
But we dare not speak of that which we seek,
Lest Death come to us in Seclusion's hold.

Is there a spark deep in the dark-
That can only be seen by the blind?
Is the only sense to creed and credence-
The creation of a sterile mind?
Are the dreams we relish and embellish-
Just pasifications of our impotence?
Is the desire to love, and to be loved-
Sanctification of self-indifference?

For in the garden, begging of pardon,
Carefully avoiding all eye contact.
We pass in hurry and wretched worry-
Of what we might miss should we interact.
Searching for the rose, Fate's to disclose
Never once looking to the sky, above.
Oh, will disenchanted eyes ever realize-
A rose is but a symbol, God is love.
© Copyright 1999 Michael Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 08-13-99 10:15 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

If there ever was a perfectly written poem, this has to be it! Nothing else to say!!
poetFemmeFatale
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2 posted 08-13-99 10:27 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Ah I agree with the deViness - perfection, sir.

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 08-13-99 10:50 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Nothing is perfect but this comes close. Packed full of sagacious wisdom and in rhyme no less.
Tim
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4 posted 08-13-99 11:43 AM       View Profile for Tim   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tim

A pleasure to experience.
Nan
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5 posted 08-13-99 11:51 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

....and we have RAVE REVUES from the Peanut Gallery!!


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Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done:
For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits,
Than I am sure I have in my whole five.
~ ˛1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75


~one voice~
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6 posted 08-13-99 03:45 PM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Have you ever been listening to a beautiful song and it gives you chills? Goose-bumps even? Well, I got goose-bumps reading this piece... WOW! I even had tears in my eyes... call me a sensitive fool.... I love this piece, I really, really do...

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."


DreamEvil
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7 posted 08-13-99 03:51 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Excellent slice of your soul! You may be assured that I will read all of your verse should it be as good as this.

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvilŠ


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8 posted 08-13-99 04:54 PM       View Profile for pandora   Email pandora   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pandora

For me? REALLY? Omigod, Micheal, this is absolutely beautiful. Are you sure there's not another pandora in your life?

Michael, it's so good to see you back posting again! We've missed you so much. This poem proves your craft-- you are indeed an artist. I'm looking forward to seeing you in dc. You're still coming, right?

Now I need to read this again.... and again... your words/rhythm/meter... all of it, is just perfectly crafted and says so much about love, life, and God's hand in our lives. Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us!

luv, pandora
Ron
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We've discussed this style often enough I don't even have to tell you how incredible I think this piece is. Wow. Is this new, Michael, or have you been holding out?

As for the content, such wisdom and Truth need no comment from such as me.
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10 posted 08-13-99 06:45 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Not much more to say, Michael, that hasn't been said. I appreciate the effort that went into this piece. Well done.
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11 posted 08-13-99 08:56 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

I am almost speechless, the feeling I had as I read this, it was like overwhelming. I can't say that a poem has ever done to me what this one has, and for some reason I just can't explain it. Your talent is wonderful, and I look forward to reading more.
Alwye
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12 posted 08-13-99 10:09 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Near perfection, Michael. The feeling, the flow, it's all absolutely wonderful. What more can I say?? Beautiful..

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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood
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13 posted 08-13-99 10:24 PM       View Profile for Artur Hawkwing   Email Artur Hawkwing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artur Hawkwing

This must have been divinely inspired. I can feel the anguish of this world, as this is truly a paradise lost. Tis a crushing loss. This one haunts the human soul. Good one, Michael.
~one voice~
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14 posted 08-14-99 07:07 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Michael, I like this one so much, I felt it needed to stay up top for awhile longer.

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."


Sally S.
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15 posted 08-14-99 11:12 AM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Michael,
This was wonderful! How it got past me, I've no idea! I wish I could add more to what has already been said..I'm afraid I can not. This is a beautiful poem...
thursdayschild
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16 posted 08-14-99 01:23 PM       View Profile for thursdayschild   Email thursdayschild   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for thursdayschild

concur with all above comments, this is a
most excellent piece of work! Thanks for sharing it.
 
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