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redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 480
Franklin, TN

0 posted 1999-08-12 11:32 PM


It was there first one
brand new
thirty year old house
they walked into
the front door
and look around
There was nothing on the floor
nothing on the walls
She said honey you can do something
for me after all

chorus:
I need some shelves in the kitchen
I need some shelves in the hall
I need some shelves in the front room
He said I don't mind at all

He reached out his fingers
and gently touched her cheek
can't it wait til morning
You're makin my knees week

They had their children
and then when
time just flew on by
Their own children
had children
and they all wondered why

Grandma and grandpa lived so far away
and always in a hurry,
have to go straight home she'd say

CHORUS

They went to parties
and picnics
and all the grandkids came
but they always
left early
the reason never changed

Grandpa's been promising me
over twenty years
to help me fix up that old house
I need shelves from there to here

As a child I imagined in amazement
of a house filled with shelves
from the attic to the basement

When they both
decided
it was time to go
I walked in through
that front door
and wouldn't you know....

.
.
.
.
there were books on the floor
and there was nothing on the walls
not a nail, not a board
there was no shelf in the hall

As I turned to leave
I saw his last note by the phone
it said
"Honey, if you're real good,
we'll put up shelves when I get home"

The End


(grin) <~~~~~
Home Depot is that way ~~~~~~~~> hehehe

------------------
Kay-lynn
**A dream is a wish your heart makes



[This message has been edited by redwriter1 (edited 08-12-99).]

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Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

1 posted 1999-08-12 11:37 PM


hehehehe. Procrastination reaches new extremes...great read!
redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 480
Franklin, TN
2 posted 1999-08-12 11:43 PM


erre Severn.. they DIDN'T procrastinate.. haha.. that's the whole point.. they went home to... ummm.. errr.. well.. let's just say they "weren't reading".. (grin)
Tara Simms
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since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA
3 posted 1999-08-12 11:53 PM


lol, in public forums, my friends and i DO refer to it as "reading". nothing better than a good book...
Severn
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since 1999-07-17
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4 posted 1999-08-12 11:55 PM


Oh. Perhaps I took that just a bit tooooo literally. (embarressed grin). I'm just sweet and innocent, that's all...! I've just read it again - I see what you mean...
redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 480
Franklin, TN
5 posted 1999-08-12 11:58 PM


I was trying to show the gentleness that a previous generation had when dealing with such subjects.. it was very personal and between two people only, not up for discussion. But in reality.. the two people themselves knew "exactly" what they were saying..

I must have missed the mark on this one.
(sigh)
I thought I was being so "obvious"

Guess this one goes back to the "writing" board.


Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

6 posted 1999-08-13 12:41 PM


NO!NO!NO! It's fine! Gosh - I feel terrible! On reading it again I saw exactly what you meant: I'm just a dim-wit at interpretation occassionally! (Don't know how to make them yellow and round!)
redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 480
Franklin, TN
7 posted 1999-08-13 07:25 AM


It's ok severn. All replies are appreciated, (smile)

Thank you for re-reading it.

------------------
Kay-lynn
**A dream is a wish your heart makes :)


graham
Member
since 1999-07-31
Posts 60
South Yorkshire, England
8 posted 1999-08-13 04:42 PM


Hey...someone need a handyman??
((grin))

Nice writing....and so good that it worked even when the humour was unseen.

Now that's clever stuff! :-)

redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 480
Franklin, TN
9 posted 1999-08-13 06:29 PM


thank you Graham.

Are you sure your licensed to do this "delicate" sort of carpentry?
(grin)
j/k

thank you for the compliment..(smile)

Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
10 posted 1999-08-13 06:39 PM


I'm licensed, Red, and I have a shelf-life of 30 years!
redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 480
Franklin, TN
11 posted 1999-08-17 07:45 AM


I'll need to see three forms of identification and your shot records.
heheheehhe Just kidding..

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