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Pain (another short, quick one)

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Alwye
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In the space between moments


0 posted 08-12-99 12:43 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alwye

Okay, just to let you know, I'm really not feeling like this...I don't really know why I wrote it..sometimes you just do, I think. But anyway, Tell me what you think.

Love is broken by crystalized winds of ice,
Emotion's winter has set in and we pay the price.
Hearts like stone pound holes within our chests,
And upon innocent ground a crimson flood rests.

Fallen angels crawl with slithering demons below,
Rejection's pain waters barren soil in a torrent flow.
Poisoned daggers slice into softened, tender flesh,
The barrier of nightmare and reality is dangerously meshed.

Screams of intolerance echo heavily in deeply scarred minds,
Repeatedly beaten on by the cruel fists of slowly creeping time.
Engulfing one's soul with illusions of dark, slightly ruby stained,
Withdrawing the evil within us all, this emotion we call pain.

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*Krista Knutson*

"Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy

[This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 08-12-99).]
© Copyright 1999 Krista Botterill - All Rights Reserved
Dusk Treader
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1 posted 08-12-99 12:58 AM       View Profile for Dusk Treader   Email Dusk Treader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dusk Treader

I loved the poem Krista, it's definetly something new for you. But I liked it, and it's definetly got an evil ring.. cool!

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"I'm down in a hole, and I don't know if I can be saved. See my heart? I've decorated it like a grave." - Alice in Chains
Artur Hawkwing
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2 posted 08-12-99 02:00 AM       View Profile for Artur Hawkwing   Email Artur Hawkwing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artur Hawkwing

Your talent is one of a kind, I could just say it over and over till you felt like screaming. (gee, why am I feeling evil tonight?)

Well, beautifully done. Time is one of our worst enemies, and it bores pain in us. Time creates emotions. Brilliantly laid.
angel girl
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within a whisper...


3 posted 08-12-99 03:37 AM       View Profile for angel girl   Email angel girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angel girl

Very, very good.

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One touch of nature makes the whole world kin.
-William Shakespeare

Enotneicna
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sometimes the words come and we never know where they came from, but somehow we feel them like we've lived them.......this work is very vivid i like it

Sharon Lee Rotondi
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5 posted 08-12-99 10:42 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Thank you all very very much.

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*Krista Knutson*

"Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy
Alwye
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6 posted 08-16-99 09:20 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

See Dream? I did post it, they just get buried too fast..oh well.

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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood
Severn
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7 posted 08-16-99 11:21 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

i love the comparisons you have between good and evil, soft and hard etc. They combine to create a poem that's ragged with its emotion. It got me!
Alwye
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Thank you very much, Severn!!!

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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood
 
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