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JP
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0 posted 08-12-99 12:11 AM       View Profile for JP   Email JP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit JP's Home Page   View IP for JP

The heavenly host, and hot buttered toast.
Sunday prayer interrupted by football
or is the other way around?
Our god is recognized by
the green color of his ink.
Our seasons are celebrated by buying,
giving, and praying about getting.
Put the Christ back in Christmas
if he was there at all.
Let freedom ring! Let it ring!
If it can afford the bell
Forgive the sinners who overcrowd hell.
Forgiveness? A joke. This is a word,
that makes mankind choke.
How can you forgive what you do?
when you knew it was wrong. You knew.
Bombs blasting, curses casting
all the while
video games drone on in hot chocolate dreams.


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Dum spiro, spero
JP

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Sue
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1 posted 08-12-99 02:42 AM       View Profile for Sue   Email Sue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sue

The modern world really does make you feel sick, doesn't it? Very well put.
elvira
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2 posted 08-12-99 04:11 AM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

though you have listed many atrocities in this poem, living in a western nation, 'tis conspicuous consumption i despise the most, as i consider myself a minimalist
Nan
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3 posted 08-12-99 10:15 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

You do have a way of getting to the point, my friend.....
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


4 posted 08-12-99 10:47 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Hang 'em high, JP! Good job!

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KRJ
Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 08-12-99 11:07 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Nan said it, you do have a point. Nice read
Poet deVine
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Excellent. Only one exception that I can see. I would like to hope there is more forgiveness in the world than what you say in your poem - or perhaps it's not forgiveness, just disinterest. Anyway, I liked this!
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