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Drifting In An Emerald Sea Of Chaotic Wonderings (Or "Dreaming")
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Drifting In An Emerald Sea Of Chaotic Wonderings (Or "Dreaming") |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Wandering timelessly through a wasteland of doubt, thoughts of you perish- My mind drifts, confusion jerking at the tethers of reality's grasp. Pulled this way- -then that, I find myself dreaming... Of a future... A destiny filled with impossibilities and realized probabilities. A step closer, approaching destinations of fantasy's desire. Crushed! Beneath my feet of iron, the hopes of others become diminished corpses, brittle, frail, no more! Reverberations of questions fly light years, only to bounce back a second later. And just at the climax, I approach my throne... god-hood awaits! But no! I'm awake. Yet, am I still dreaming? ------------------ Where did I go wrong, I never needed this before, I need a woman, to help me feel. -Live- |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
my philosopher friend  ...i am a bit concerned about you though...i hear you have been seeing strange shapes?  [This message has been edited by elvira (edited 08-11-99).] |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
Yes, I think you are dreaming still. Great poem. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Elvira, hon, you called me friend, I blush, I smile, this kiss I send! The shapes I see are in my mind, Nowhere for another to find... I dread to tell the form I saw, For I'm sure you'll laugh, ha-ha! Thanks so much, my dear sweet Sue, but if I am dreaming, what of you? ------------------ Where did I go wrong, I never needed this before, I need a woman, to help me feel. -Live- |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent! (though I did for a moment think you were going to ask us all to bow down before you - or is that casting pearls before swine?) |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Excellent work Christopher! I like everything about it, especially the form. You read a line and it drifts you along, then SNAP! the next line brings you right back... Wonderful piece! ------------------ Dum spiro, spero JP |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Thank you deVine, JP.... Am I dreaming you two too (tu-tu?) ------------------ Where did I go wrong, I never needed this before, I need a woman, to help me feel. -Live- |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very thought provoking...I enjoyed it. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Kissing Elvira - hmmmmmmm...! This is great - what do you see in your destiny now I wonder? |
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