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Seymour Tabin
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You need but

Breach your zone of self control
Reach the touchstone of your soul.

Turn your key of desire
And fire innovations you
Leave behind the mundane mire
Sire, the unencumbered view.

Walk upon some rainbow's ramp
Hear a camp of angels sing.
Wring and rub Aladdins lamp
Damp your mental whimpering.

Be a genie of augment
Scent your dreams of fantasy
Fill your heart with mild content
Vent them to reality.
© Copyright 1999 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 08-11-99 11:07 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I like the content, but should "innovations" be "innovate"?

I'll be checking back!

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KRJ
Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

Seymour Tabin
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Sunshine, your right, my mistake thanks.
Sue
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Innovations, schminovations, I liked the poem nonetheless.
WhtDove
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Yes, I did like this one, nice job!
Nan
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My Guy, Sy...




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Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done:
For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits,
Than I am sure I have in my whole five.
~ 1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75


Seymour Tabin
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Once again thank you all for the comments.
Severn
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I's likes this! Great rhetorical poetic conventions! Just wondering about innovations...I actually think it sounds OK, if you read fire as a verb and insert a mental comma after innovations - am I way off?!
Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 08-12-99 11:32 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

To Severn, yes you could do that. I think I had that in mind when I was writing.
Drauntz
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beautiful and lesson's of life.

full of wisdoms

enjoyed
Artic Wind
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enjoyed

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