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Terri
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since 08-08-99
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Turtle Creek, PA


0 posted 08-08-99 06:32 PM       View Profile for Terri   Email Terri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Terri

Once again morning comes too soon
Off he goes to work and the kids want to be fed
I stumble out of bed, fueled only by their needs.

(i'm eighteen again and you are my world)


Breakfast is done, the kids are watching TV
I wash the sleep from my eyes and look into the mirror
To see what face I will be wearing today.

(friends before we were lovers, you knew me better than i knew myself)


I drink my coffee and think of what needs done
So much to do, so little time and yet
There I sit and my mind wanders.

(when you touch, your scent, your smile was all that i lived for)


Dishes to wash, rooms to clean
Squabbles to quell, tears to wipe away
Trying to do it all before time slips by.

(i rush out into the night to meet you, sensing your presence before i even see you)


Bills to pay and meals to fix
He comes home and shares his day
Kisses for all and off I go to work.

(there are no words, your eyes tell me all i need to know)


Do my job with thoughtless effort
Share my life with friendly strangers
I say my good-byes and go home.

(your touch lingers, even when we are apart)


The house is quiet, so very still
And once again my thoughts are my own
As I slowly go up the stairs to bed.

(the pounding of my heart engulfs the sounds of the night around us)


He turns to me, this gentle man
Secure in his love for me, wishes me good night
And then he kisses me.

(and then you kiss me)


I close my eyes and feel the day slip away
With practiced ease my thoughts turn into dreams
And once more...

(i'm eighteen again and you are my world...and always will be)




[This message has been edited by Terri (edited 08-16-99).]
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Balladeer
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1 posted 08-08-99 07:52 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I could fill this screen with my reply to this poem but let me just say....BEAUTIFUL! You have done a superb job of construction here to create this. It is thought provoking and I hope the readers can grasp the true meanings of your words. Seems incredible that it could be here an hour without being commented on but don't be discouraged. Sometimes it takes a little time for new members to receive proper acknowledgement. With writing like this, it will come quickly for you, I assure you. Well done and please give us more.
petra
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since 08-08-99
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freshwater ca. usa


2 posted 08-08-99 08:18 PM       View Profile for petra   Email petra   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for petra

Terri, what a wonderful cloth you have woven a very effective device. Can you imagine the one life without the other?...p
Nan
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3 posted 08-08-99 09:48 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Allow me to echo the gentlemen who precede me here...
This is very, very, nicely done.
If only people could always keep that special closeness between them
Let's see more of your work, please?


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Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done:
For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits,
Than I am sure I have in my whole five.
~ 1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75


RainbowGirl
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since 07-31-99
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4 posted 08-09-99 02:26 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

So warm, loving and gentle..brings a smile to my face:-))

Hugs

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

Terri
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Posts 82
Turtle Creek, PA


5 posted 08-13-99 12:58 AM       View Profile for Terri   Email Terri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Terri

Thank you all for your kind words! You might want to read it again, only this time there are 2 different men being referred to. Kinda changes the whole tone of it. Thanks again!
Tara Simms
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since 08-12-99
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Honea Path, SC USA


6 posted 08-13-99 03:54 PM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

Terri, I liked it. What I'm getting from it is a woman who is bogged down in the reality of her monotonous life and finds her happiness elsewhere. On the one hand, she has the husband who loves her, and on the other, the lover who makes her heart race.

Is my interpretation anywhere on the mark?
Fred Hobbs
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7 posted 08-13-99 08:47 PM       View Profile for Fred Hobbs   Email Fred Hobbs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fred Hobbs's Home Page   View IP for Fred Hobbs

Ok, I missed the true meaning the first time I read it but this is really heavy duty stuff. Very well done and very much appreciated.

sandman
Alwye
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In the space between moments


8 posted 08-13-99 09:48 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Very well done, this is beautiful.

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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood
JANNA
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since 06-18-99
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arlington, tx usa


9 posted 08-13-99 09:53 PM       View Profile for JANNA   Email JANNA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JANNA

Listen, I read this like you meant it, and let me tell you, it was extremely thought provoking...a little spooky actually...i love this...
Terri
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Posts 82
Turtle Creek, PA


10 posted 08-13-99 11:23 PM       View Profile for Terri   Email Terri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Terri

Thank you all! Tara--dead center, babe! It's funny how time can sweeten your memories. You never forget your first love.
Janna--spooky? Love that...thank you!!


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redwriter1
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since 07-22-99
Posts 476
Franklin, TN


11 posted 08-13-99 11:33 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

funny how the mind wonders to past lives, years. dreams. and loves..


they just won't let go will they???

Very nicely done.. I"m certainly impressed.. and I loved the format... very orginal..

(and I don't say that often). hahahah

I really enjoyed it.. thank you....for the pleasure.. (smile)
pen of passion
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since 08-11-99
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12 posted 08-14-99 12:13 AM       View Profile for pen of passion   Email pen of passion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pen of passion

I must think like you. I saw two men right away. I liked it.
Terri
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Posts 82
Turtle Creek, PA


13 posted 08-14-99 02:59 AM       View Profile for Terri   Email Terri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Terri

Red--I am humbled by such praise!(Not gonna let you forget you said it either...LOL)
Pen--You know what they say, Great minds...(wink)

Once again, thank you all for such a warm reception at my first endeavor! Wandering into this forum was a godsend for it has given me much inspiration and delight. Now, if I could only get this little voice to shut up...keeps mumbling something about a one trick pony.

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"In everyone's life, at some time, our inner fire goes out. It is then burst into flame by an encounter with another human being. We should all be thankful for those people who rekindle the inner spirit."
--Albert Schweitzer

graham
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since 07-31-99
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14 posted 08-16-99 05:52 PM       View Profile for graham   Email graham   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for graham

That is one of the best I've read in this forum...I really liked it very much!!
Terri
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Posts 82
Turtle Creek, PA


15 posted 08-16-99 06:04 PM       View Profile for Terri   Email Terri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Terri

Graham--very high praise, indeed! I feel I've yet to aspire to the lofty poetic heights many here have attained but your kind words are greatly appreciated!
Seymour Tabin
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since 07-07-99
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Tamarac Fla


16 posted 08-16-99 06:16 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

You have attained something in words that is very elusive and I compliment you. A difficult thing well done, I will watch for your poems.
Carolina Girl
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since 08-14-99
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17 posted 08-16-99 06:17 PM       View Profile for Carolina Girl   Email Carolina Girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Carolina Girl

Well, I can sure relate to BOTH!!! Wonderful work! I'm glad I read it....Terry, You're very good...
moonmoon
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since 08-13-99
Posts 280
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18 posted 08-17-99 12:26 AM       View Profile for moonmoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonmoon



Beautiful work Terri...I need to go back & look up all your works..Could learn a lot from you..

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"No one was ever ruined from without;
The final ruin comes from within." Amelia E. Barr

Sue
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since 08-04-99
Posts 407
France


19 posted 08-17-99 02:15 AM       View Profile for Sue   Email Sue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sue

I think it's all been said already, but I would like to echo the sentiments already expressed. Really good!
Terri
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since 08-08-99
Posts 82
Turtle Creek, PA


20 posted 08-17-99 02:30 AM       View Profile for Terri   Email Terri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Terri

::shuffling feet:: Aw, you guys! ::blush::
Seymour--the poem was something that I carried in my heart for quite a few years. It was only dumb luck that I was able to convey those feelings to others. Thanks!

Caroline--ahh, a kindred spirit...LOL! Thank you.

Moonmoon--how sweet! Your research won't take very long since I've done only 4 posts...LOL! As far as learning from me, I am truly flattered but I suggest you look up to the 'stars' here 'cause I'm just learning to crawl myself : )

Sue--thank you! I always appreciate your comments 'cause I know you'll stop me make an @$$ of myself ; )



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