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Death of Love

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grasshopper63
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0 posted 08-07-99 10:15 AM       View Profile for grasshopper63   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for grasshopper63

Death of a Lover

Decay and rot now fill this place
Where life once did abound
Her love denied, she wanted space
To live and breath and move.

And so her soul did get its rest
She died from so much pain
She wanted peace, she wanted joy
She vowed never to love again

Her heart is cold, she loves no more
She found no one to love
Her feet are cold and very sore
She searched many days for love

Cold, beaten, numb, ashamed she lies
Alas! Her man is gone
He left her unloved, scarred to die
He didn't give a damn

She'll live again, not here, not now
She'll love somewhere, somehow
Decay and rot may now be here
But love will rise again.

Yes! Love will rise, somewhere, somehow,
She knows it in her heart
She cannot breath it out aloud
For fear he breaks her heart.


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JohnDoe82
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1 posted 08-07-99 10:50 AM       View Profile for JohnDoe82   Email JohnDoe82   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JohnDoe82

I think the descriptions in the first stanza are excellent. Perhaps it's just me, but the last line in each stanza seems very choopy, I guess I'm just not reading it correctly. Still, it is a very well written poem. The second to last stanza contains an excellent message, don't forget it yourself.
JohnDoe82
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2 posted 08-07-99 10:51 AM       View Profile for JohnDoe82   Email JohnDoe82   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JohnDoe82

I think the descriptions in the first stanza are excellent. Perhaps it's just me, but the last line in each stanza seems very choopy, I guess I'm just not reading it correctly. Still, it is a very well written poem. The second to last stanza contains an excellent message, don't forget it yourself.
Twilight_Angel
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3 posted 08-07-99 11:49 AM       View Profile for Twilight_Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Twilight_Angel

I like the message this poem delivers. It is well explained and nicely interpretted. The last stanza is very powerful!
demerara99
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4 posted 08-07-99 04:49 PM       View Profile for demerara99   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for demerara99

Wow...with the right music and singer...this would make a powerful song!!!
hoot_owl_rn
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Nicely done...it rings true in this heart

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Dragoness
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6 posted 08-07-99 09:31 PM       View Profile for Dragoness   Email Dragoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dragoness's Home Page   View IP for Dragoness

Beautifully done, And so true!!

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.
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