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romancing the phone

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pusskatt
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0 posted 08-07-99 07:27 AM       View Profile for pusskatt   Email pusskatt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pusskatt

I have a secert lover
I must keep him to myself
he fills my soul with passion
and no "body" can take his place

our passion is unconventional
yet I cannot say "no more"
I await each night to hear him
and he leaves me wanting more

We met quite by accident
the timing was just right
both of us were empty
both in a loveless fight

We fill each other's empty place
thought I have never even seen his face
I've never held or touched his hand
for he lives in a far away land

And yet we are indeed lovers
I never knew that this could be
but when he rings me late at night
I know what will
will be......
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Toerag
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1 posted 08-07-99 08:37 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Puss............great title....great poem....I like this!
suthern
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on the threshold of a dream


2 posted 08-07-99 08:42 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I do, too!!!! Ahhhhh, what the sound of a beloved voice can do....
LngJhnAg
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3 posted 08-07-99 08:46 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Puss

I liked the story line - could completely relate. The title was great, too. The rhyming part and style needs a little more polish - the first stanza didn't have a rhyme, then the second stanza used the same word. in the second and fourth lines. The rhythm in third stanza came fast, but the fourth stanza changed the rhyming pattern and rhythm. Overall, I enjoyed the story a lot - been there and done that - additionally, you captured something many people have yet to realize - personal appearance (looks) do not matter when hearts are sympatico. Nice theme, nice approach.
pusskatt
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4 posted 08-08-99 12:40 AM       View Profile for pusskatt   Email pusskatt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pusskatt

Thank you all, glad you liked it.

LngJhnAg.... A big thank you for your help!
pusskatt
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5 posted 08-08-99 12:43 AM       View Profile for pusskatt   Email pusskatt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pusskatt

Thank you all, glad you liked it.

LngJhnAg... A big thanks for your help!

Pusskatt.
elvira
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6 posted 08-09-99 08:58 PM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

Puss, i can relate, as i don't get to see my luv very often


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one night at the airport...Childhood Memories...your countenance...eight short weeks...My One and Only...Music to my Ears...hoarse whispers...What will it be?...just watching tv...break my heart...are you ready?...Feel the need?...serving wench...Tribute to M.J....take a guess...sink or swim...stolen hours...the mistress...Perfection...a little girl...Mr. Jones...
life is like...insomnia...devotion...too soon...07-20-69...craving...Master...chat?...apart...plain...hush...then...vice...shameless self promotion


Balladeer
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7 posted 08-09-99 09:08 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Good words, pusskatt....but beware of phon-y lovers!
Alwye
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In the space between moments


8 posted 08-09-99 10:36 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Nicely done!!

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*Krista Knutson*

"Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy
pusskatt
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9 posted 08-12-99 05:36 AM       View Profile for pusskatt   Email pusskatt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pusskatt

Thank you all for replying, it is great to get some response, this is the first time I have shown my stuff so to speak. I am very amaturish(?) and need the response. Thanks again.
 
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