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blueloon
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0 posted 08-06-99 03:03 PM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for blueloon

Look deeply into mine;
behold the beauty.
Look deeply into yours;
Behold the beauty.

Through the dark pith of mine,
depict a path...
belabored by many feet.

Each foot brings convictions
of your thoughts.
Distinguish the vital force,
and you will see the creature.

Lay your wit upon my breast.
Turn off your lamps.
Attend to the rhythmic daughtlessness
of my marrow.

Breath in...listen...exhale...

My sentiments exactly.
You've looked deeply into mine
and found my soul.



[This message has been edited by blueloon (edited 08-07-99).]
© Copyright 1999 blueloon - All Rights Reserved
wayoutwalt
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1 posted 08-06-99 03:11 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

yours wa a nice insight into the soul love it
LngJhnAg
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2 posted 08-06-99 03:18 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Blue

I loved that part about laying wit upon your breast. That is very, very deep (snapping fingers beatnik style)
blueloon
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3 posted 08-06-99 03:23 PM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blueloon

Thank you both for your kind words...Haven't written in awhile and it felt good!
blueloon

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To give yourself keeps yourself still,
And you must live, drawn by your own sweet skill.
-shakespeare
And so of you, beauteous and lovely youth,
When that shall vade, by verse distills your truth.
-shakespeare
blueloon
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4 posted 08-07-99 03:36 PM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blueloon

made some changes and wouls love some feedback...Thank you
blueloon
poetFemmeFatale
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5 posted 08-10-99 03:57 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Superb work blue...once again, I find myself challenged to follow your thoughts into a deep well of emotion...I love the challenge! What a really nice piece, on such a wonderful subject...

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

poetFemmeFatale
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6 posted 08-10-99 03:59 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

"The eyes are the window to the soul..." I would love to take a peak into yours.....aaahhhh....

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

 
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