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White Shoulders

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Alicat
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0 posted 08-06-99 01:58 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alicat

White Shoulders


He lied
Pure and simple
A little white lie
To him
'Out with the boys'
And I wish
I could believe
The White Shoulders
On his shirt
Came from me


Alicat
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elvira
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1 posted 08-06-99 02:05 PM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

a mime perhaps?

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LngJhnAg
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err, ahh, Alicat?

Perhaps I know where he went. Have you read Balladeer's poem about the diner? Now, don't get upset. Just think about it. Your wardrobe could double overnight!
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3 posted 08-06-99 04:38 PM       View Profile for Ladycat   Email Ladycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ladycat's Home Page   View IP for Ladycat

You have put in a vague and a hard place.. Where are you coming from with this piece? Is this about a priest? Nope, never mind that comment.. hehehe.. You know that I have sat here and read this for the last ten minutes and I don't get it.. I thought that maybe it was about a soldier.. hehehe.. You know that I have to know what was behind this now don't you..

I'm lost and I can't get out... HELP!!!!!!
I already know that you are going to send me to hell for this one..
You know that I'm just kidding and that I like the piece.. Now all that I have to do is understand it..

Love,
Lady

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[This message has been edited by Ladycat (edited 08-06-99).]
Andrew Scott
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Makeup: it can both hide or accentuate the truth of what lies below. A well written piece Alicat.
Tim
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The ability to express without a wasted word or syllable... and yet paint the complete picute...
the essence of a fine poem...
hoot_owl_rn
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Very well written Ali.....not a single wasted word!!!

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Alicat
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7 posted 08-06-99 08:30 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Ok, first off, thanks everyone for the responses...I can see this was not interpreted as it was written. FYI, White Shoulders is a brand of women's perfume, which is alluded to in this poem about possible betrayal from a lady's perspective.

Hope that clears things up.

Alicat
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