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The seven bells ( A Pantoum)
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The seven bells ( A Pantoum) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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The seven bells ( A Pantoum) Forged from tears of grieving people Sang seven bells that rang farewells. Ringing from some spire's steeple They rang goodbye lost clienteles. Sang seven bells that rang farewells Flavoring help for different donee They rang goodbye lost clienteles Sounding sounds' that flowed like honey. Flavoring help for different donee They circled through the towns abide Sounding sounds' that flowed like honey, Relieving grief the human tide. They circled through the towns abide I heard them ring just yesterday Relieving grief the human tide, I'm sure they rang from far away. I heard them ring just yesterday Forged from tears of grieving people I'm sure they rang from far away, Ringing from some spire's steeple. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Five Bells..... I mean Stars.... for this one...   [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 08-07-99).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you so much Nan You threw me a life saver in this ocean of poetry. |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
"Forged from tears of grieving people" WOW! Beautiful. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you Sue for the WOW. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Attaboy Sy!Show that Miss-know-it-all she ain't the only pantoom writer around!! This place is getting too strange!  PANTOUM? Someone thinks they wrote a PANTOUM? Miss Whats-er-Ness???  [This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 08-07-99).] [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 08-07-99).] |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
Impressive... |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
Nicely done! ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Nan - Since I've already revealed my ignorance about poetry, AND my eagerness to learn more - please define the structure of a pantoum. Please? I think I picked up some of it, but I'd really like some formal definition. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A PANTOUM - is a poem consisting of six quatrains in a chosen meter with a repitition of lines following the pattern of: b1-c1-b2-c2 c1-d1-c2-d2 d1-e1-d2-e2 e1-f1-e2-f2 f1-a1-f2-a2 There's some discrepency about whether the lines should repeat verbatim, or contain slight variations with the final word repeated exactly. Balladeer says yeah, I say eh! Sy obviously listens to Balladeer - and does one fine job of it.... [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 08-08-99).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ This is just wonderful ! ! ! I am impressed ... VERY ~ *Hugs* and *smiles*  ~*Marge*~~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I really like the Pantoum and I really like this one. Plus, this is my first sighthing of Marge at PiP. I am sure I missed some of her posts, but what a delight to see her purple pen again. A |
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