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The seven bells ( A Pantoum)

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Seymour Tabin
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The seven bells ( A Pantoum)

Forged from tears of grieving people
Sang seven bells that rang farewells.
Ringing from some spire's steeple
They rang goodbye lost clienteles.

Sang seven bells that rang farewells
Flavoring help for different donee
They rang goodbye lost clienteles
Sounding sounds' that flowed like honey.

Flavoring help for different donee
They circled through the towns abide
Sounding sounds' that flowed like honey,
Relieving grief the human tide.

They circled through the towns abide
I heard them ring just yesterday
Relieving grief the human tide,
I'm sure they rang from far away.

I heard them ring just yesterday
Forged from tears of grieving people
I'm sure they rang from far away,
Ringing from some spire's steeple.
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Five Bells..... I mean Stars.... for this one...




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Seymour Tabin
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Thank you so much Nan You threw me a life saver in this ocean of poetry.
Sue
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"Forged from tears of grieving people" WOW! Beautiful.
Seymour Tabin
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Thank you Sue for the WOW.
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Attaboy Sy!Show that Miss-know-it-all she ain't the only pantoom writer around!!

This place is getting too strange!



PANTOUM? Someone thinks they wrote a PANTOUM?
Miss Whats-er-Ness???



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Tim
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Impressive...
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Nicely done!

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Nan - Since I've already revealed my ignorance about poetry, AND my eagerness to learn more - please define the structure of a pantoum. Please? I think I picked up some of it, but I'd really like some formal definition.
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A PANTOUM - is a poem consisting of six quatrains in a chosen meter with a repitition of lines following the pattern of:

a1-b1-a2-b2
b1-c1-b2-c2
c1-d1-c2-d2
d1-e1-d2-e2
e1-f1-e2-f2
f1-a1-f2-a2


There's some discrepency about whether the lines should repeat verbatim, or contain slight variations with the final word repeated exactly. Balladeer says yeah, I say eh!
Sy obviously listens to Balladeer - and does one fine job of it....




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Seymour~
This is just wonderful ! ! !
I am impressed ... VERY ~
*Hugs* and *smiles*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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I really like the Pantoum and I really like this one.  Plus, this is my first sighthing of Marge at PiP.  I am sure I missed some of her posts, but what a delight to see her purple pen again.

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